Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples without filler words like 'umm' or 'uh'. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

예시: I usually eat snacks throughout the day, such as chips, chocolate bars, and candies, because I really enjoy them and often buy them.

제안: Focus on giving a clear opinion with reasons and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes and avoid informal phrases like 'I'll do it'.

예시: I don't think eating a lot of snacks is healthy because I exercise regularly and want to maintain my fitness. However, I still enjoy snacks occasionally because I love their taste.

제안: Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Give a direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because most children love sweet treats. For example, I used to enjoy candies and cookies regularly.

제안: Make your answer more natural by avoiding filler words and awkward phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons or effects.

예시: I prefer sweet snacks like chocolate bars and biscuits because I enjoy their taste, and they help me feel full between meals.

× Well, I don't think so, uh, since I am exercising and I'm going to gym, it's not uh, good for me and my body to consume a lot of snacks.

✓ Well, I don't think so, uh, since I am exercising and I'm going to the gym, it's not uh, good for me and my body to consume a lot of snacks.

The phrase 'going to gym' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'gym'. This is a common error related to article usage (Grammar Problem Type ID: 17). The correct phrase is 'going to the gym' because 'gym' is a specific place that requires the definite article.

× But anyways, I'll do it 'cause I love getting a snacks.

✓ But anyways, I'll do it 'cause I love getting snacks.

The phrase 'a snacks' incorrectly combines the singular article 'a' with the plural noun 'snacks'. This is a singular and plural issue (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). The correction removes the article 'a' to correctly use the plural noun 'snacks'.

× Of course I think every child, umm, loves snacks and uh, it's a lot of them cause uh, most of the Childs love sweet things and uh, obviously I ate a lot of snacks when I was young.

✓ Of course I think every child, umm, loves snacks and uh, there are a lot of them cause uh, most of the children love sweet things and uh, obviously I ate a lot of snacks when I was young.

The word 'Childs' is an incorrect plural form of 'child'. The correct plural is 'children'. This is a singular and plural issue (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). Also, 'it's a lot of them' is awkward; 'there are a lot of them' is more appropriate, involving 'There be issue' (ID 3).

× I'm more of a sweets lover person, I eat a lot of chocolate bars throughout the day and umm I eat biscuits a lot.

✓ I'm more of a sweets-loving person, I eat a lot of chocolate bars throughout the day and umm I eat biscuits a lot.

The phrase 'sweets lover person' is awkward and incorrect. The correct form is 'sweets-loving person', using a compound adjective with a hyphen. This is an incorrect use of adjectives (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13).