Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I try" repeated multiple times. Also, correct the phrase "visit sweet treat" to "a sweet treat." Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually avoid snacking and stick to three main meals daily. However, sometimes I reward myself with a small sweet treat after lunch.

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by removing filler words like "umm" and using more precise linking words. Also, try to expand your explanation with specific reasons or examples.

예시: I believe it depends on the type of snacks. Healthy options like fruits or nuts are fine, but regularly eating unhealthy snacks can harm your health.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and filler words. Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: When I was a child, my mom was very attentive to my diet and helped me maintain healthy eating habits, so I rarely ate snacks between meals.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating "I try" and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, correct "sweet tea" to "sweet tooth."

예시: I prefer healthy snacks like fruits and nuts, but since I have a sweet tooth, I occasionally enjoy chocolate bars or ice cream.

× But when I want to reward myself visit sweet treat, I just try to have a little sweet snack after my lunch.

✓ But when I want to reward myself by visiting a sweet treat, I just try to have a little sweet snack after my lunch.

The original sentence lacks the preposition 'by' before the gerund 'visiting'. In English, to express the means of rewarding oneself, the structure 'reward myself by doing something' is used. Adding 'by' correctly links the verb 'reward' with the gerund 'visiting'. Also, 'visit sweet treat' is incorrect; it should be 'visiting a sweet treat' or better 'visiting a sweet shop' or 'having a sweet treat'. Here, 'visiting a sweet treat' is used to keep close to the original meaning.

× If it's healthy like fruits or nuts, it's OK to have them.

✓ If they are healthy like fruits or nuts, it's OK to have them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to plural nouns 'fruits or nuts'. The correct pronoun for plural nouns is 'they'. Therefore, 'If they are healthy' is the correct form to agree with the plural subject.

× But if you have like this umm habit to eat unhealthy stuff daily, it's not good.

✓ But if you have a habit of eating unhealthy stuff daily, it's not good.

The phrase 'like this umm habit to eat' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'a habit of eating'. Also, 'like this' is unnecessary and informal here. Using 'a habit of eating' correctly uses the noun 'habit' followed by the preposition 'of' and the gerund 'eating' to describe the habit.

× When I was a child, my mom actually umm was very attentive to what I'm eating and she was helping me to maintain a healthy diet, so I didn't usually have any snacks throughout the day except the main meals.

✓ When I was a child, my mom was actually very attentive to what I was eating and she helped me to maintain a healthy diet, so I didn't usually have any snacks throughout the day except the main meals.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I'm eating' with past context. It should be 'I was eating' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'she was helping' is better as 'she helped' for simple past tense to match the narrative. Removing 'umm' improves formality.

× So for example, fruits or nuts are my favorite, but because I have a sweet tea, sometimes I can grab some chocolate bars or even an ice cream.

✓ So for example, fruits or nuts are my favorites, but because I have a sweet tooth, sometimes I can grab some chocolate bars or even ice cream.

The phrase 'I have a sweet tea' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'I have a sweet tooth' meaning a liking for sweet foods. Also, 'my favorite' should be plural 'my favorites' when referring to multiple items like fruits or nuts. 'An ice cream' is better as 'ice cream' without an article because 'ice cream' is an uncountable noun here.