Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "definitely will eat" and improve vocabulary by using more precise terms like "spicy strips" instead of "spices strips." Also, try to limit your answer to around 3-4 sentences for better effectiveness.

예시: I usually eat snacks like chips, chocolates, or spicy strips when I'm watching TV or browsing my phone. Snacking helps me relax and feel calm during these times.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "unhealthy appetite" and "not a good habitat." Try to use clearer expressions like "unhealthy habit" and ensure subject-verb agreement. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I think eating snacks too often is an unhealthy habit for me because I spend most of my time sitting at home. Although snacking makes me feel comfortable and relaxed, it isn't good for my health in the long run.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes personal feelings, which is good. However, the word "ecstatic" is quite strong and may sound unnatural in this context. Consider using more common expressions like "very happy" or "cheerful." Also, try to add a linking phrase to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, chips were my favourite, especially when I felt frustrated because they helped me feel happier and more cheerful.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas like "really delicious" and "make me feel fulfilling and even ecstatic." Use linking words to connect your points and choose more common expressions for feelings.

예시: My favourite snacks are chips, especially those with salty and sweet flavours. They taste great and always satisfy my cravings.

× Well, most of the time when I am watching TV or browsing my phone, I definitely will eat chips, chocolates or spices strips.

✓ Well, most of the time when I am watching TV or browsing my phone, I will definitely eat chips, chocolates or spice strips.

The modal verb 'will' is correctly used to indicate future intention, but the adverb 'definitely' is better placed after 'will' for natural English word order. Also, 'spices strips' is incorrect; it should be 'spice strips' as 'spice' is an adjective here describing the strips.

× Well, snacking too often is an unhealthy appetite for me.

✓ Well, snacking too often is unhealthy for me.

The phrase 'unhealthy appetite' is incorrect in this context. 'Unhealthy' should describe the action 'snacking too often' directly, so 'is unhealthy for me' is the correct expression. The preposition 'for' is correctly used here.

× Although it definitely helps me feel comfortable and relaxed, is not a good habitat in my daily life.

✓ Although it definitely helps me feel comfortable and relaxed, it is not good for my health in daily life.

The sentence lacks a subject before 'is not', causing a sentence structure error. Also, 'habitat' is incorrectly used; the intended meaning is likely 'habit' or 'healthy habit'. The correction replaces 'habitat' with 'good for my health' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Having them actually helped me cheer up and even feel ecstatic.

✓ Having them actually helped me cheer up and even feel ecstatic.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and requires no correction.

× Specifically the salty and sweet flavor.

✓ Specifically, the salty and sweet flavors.

The sentence fragment lacks a verb and is incomplete. Adding a comma and pluralising 'flavor' to 'flavors' makes it a proper phrase describing the snacks. Also, 'specifically' should be followed by a comma to separate it from the rest of the sentence.

× They taste really delicious and always make me feel fulfilling and even ecstatic.

✓ They taste really delicious and always make me feel full and even ecstatic.

The adjective 'fulfilling' is incorrectly used to describe a feeling. The correct adjective to describe the sensation after eating is 'full'. 'Fulfilling' describes something that satisfies emotionally or intellectually, not physical fullness.