Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to give a direct response with clear structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to clarify your schedule for eating snacks.

예시: I usually eat snacks once a week as part of a planned schedule to control my calorie intake. For example, I allow myself to have a snack on weekends to satisfy my cravings without overeating.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains confusing vocabulary and grammar mistakes. Focus on giving a clear opinion with specific reasons and use appropriate vocabulary related to health and nutrition.

예시: I think eating snacks can be healthy if they contain good ingredients like fiber and protein. For instance, snacks made from nuts or fruits provide essential nutrients that benefit our bodies.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using better linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, try to avoid repetition and provide a bit more detail.

예시: No, I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my parents, especially my father, believed they were unhealthy. Therefore, they limited our snack consumption to help us grow properly.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to directly answer the question with specific examples of snacks you like, and explain why you like them using linking words for coherence.

예시: I like to try new and unique snacks that are not very popular. For example, I often buy exotic flavored chips or snacks from different countries because I enjoy discovering new tastes.

× Well, I have been controlling myself since my 20s and nowadays there is a schedule for me to eat a snack or have some calories in someday after week, for example just one time or.

✓ Well, I have been controlling myself since my 20s and nowadays there is a schedule for me to eat a snack or have some calories on some day after a week, for example just one time.

The phrase 'in someday after week' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' for days, and 'some day' should be two words. Also, 'after week' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct. So, it should be 'on some day after a week'. This corrects the prepositional usage and article usage.

× Well, it depends on under in degree in the ingredients of the snacks.

✓ Well, it depends on the degree of the ingredients in the snacks.

The phrase 'depends on under in degree in' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition is 'depends on' followed by 'the degree of' something. Also, 'in the ingredients' is correct to indicate the contents. This correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence structure.

× Nowadays, because of the high technology, our snacks have a lot of fabric, protein and Oh my God, three, which contains a lot of benefit for our bodies.

✓ Nowadays, because of high technology, our snacks have a lot of fiber, protein, and oh my God, fat, which contain a lot of benefits for our bodies.

The word 'fabric' is incorrect; the correct word is 'fiber' when referring to nutritional content. 'Three' seems to be a mishearing or misstatement; likely intended 'fat'. Also, 'contains' should be 'contain' because the subject 'fiber, protein, and fat' is plural. 'Benefit' should be plural 'benefits' to match the plural noun. This corrects vocabulary and subject-verb agreement.

× No, because my family, my parents and to be more specific, my father didn't let us eat a lot of snacks because he believed that these are unhealthy and don't help us to grow.

✓ No, because my family, my parents, and to be more specific, my father didn't let us eat a lot of snacks because he believed that these were unhealthy and didn't help us to grow.

Since the sentence refers to past beliefs and actions, the verbs 'are' and 'don't' should be in the past tense 'were' and 'didn't' to maintain tense consistency. This corrects the past tense usage.

× Well based on my character in shopping I usually buy some brand new stuff and I just love to buy some brand and brand new and also a new snacks that no one wanna try.

✓ Well, based on my character in shopping, I usually buy some brand new stuff and I just love to buy some brand new and also new snacks that no one wants to try.

The phrase 'a new snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural and should not have the article 'a'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'wants to' for proper grammar. The phrase 'some brand and brand new' is redundant; 'some brand new' suffices. Commas are added for clarity. This corrects article usage, verb form, and redundancy.