Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar points.

예시: I usually eat snacks during my free time or at the office. I prefer healthy options like nuts, seeds, and fox nuts, which we call makanas locally, and I avoid unhealthy snacks such as biscuits.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'more than anything'. Also, try to be more specific about why balanced snacks are important.

예시: Yes, eating nutritious snacks that contain a balanced amount of carbohydrates, vitamins, and minerals is healthy. However, eating too many snacks can be harmful, so it's important to consume them in moderation to maintain a good appetite for main meals.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for coherence. Also, correct grammar mistakes for better clarity.

예시: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because I was busy with school and homework. Therefore, I rarely had time to munch between meals.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'being at this age' and ensure correct article usage.

예시: At my age, I prefer healthy and nutritious snacks like fox nuts, seeds, and fruits. However, I occasionally eat unhealthy snacks such as biscuits and chips, usually only once a month.

× I usually like to eat snacks whenever I get some free time or I am at my office during which I prefer to eat healthy snacks that includes the nuts, seed, fox nuts, makanas that we call in our local language.

✓ I usually like to eat snacks whenever I get some free time or I am at my office during which I prefer to eat healthy snacks that include nuts, seeds, fox nuts, makanas that we call in our local language.

The verb 'includes' should be 'include' to agree with the plural subject 'snacks'. Also, 'seed' should be plural 'seeds' to match the list of multiple items. In English, verbs must agree in number with their subjects, and countable nouns should be plural when referring to more than one.

× But I do prefer to avoid unhealthy snacks such as the biscuits or anything.

✓ But I do prefer to avoid unhealthy snacks such as biscuits or anything else.

The definite article 'the' is not used before general plural nouns like 'biscuits' when speaking generally. Also, 'anything' should be 'anything else' for clarity. Articles should be used appropriately to indicate specificity or generality.

× Yes, obviously it is very healthy to eat snacks that are nutritious and have the balanced amount of carbs, vitamins and minerals.

✓ Yes, obviously it is very healthy to eat snacks that are nutritious and have a balanced amount of carbs, vitamins and minerals.

The phrase 'the balanced amount' is incorrect here because it implies a specific amount known to both speaker and listener. 'A balanced amount' is correct to indicate a general, appropriate quantity. Quantifiers like 'a' and 'the' must be used correctly to convey meaning.

× But if anything, more than anything is not good for your health.

✓ But eating too much of anything is not good for your health.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly uses 'if anything, more than anything'. The correction clarifies the meaning by specifying 'eating too much of anything'. Pronouns and phrases should be used clearly to convey intended meaning.

× So we need to eat healthy snacks also in a proportionate value so that we get enough hunger for the remaining.

✓ So we need to eat healthy snacks in proportion so that we remain hungry enough for the main meals.

The phrase 'in a proportionate value' is incorrect and unclear. 'In proportion' is the correct expression. Also, 'get enough hunger for the remaining' is awkward; 'remain hungry enough for the main meals' is clearer. Quantifiers and expressions should be used idiomatically.

× No, I didn't eat snacks when I was young because during the younger you hardly get any time to for munching because we go to school after which we need to complete our homework.

✓ No, I didn't eat snacks when I was young because during my younger days I hardly got any time for munching since we went to school and then had to complete our homework.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the time referred to is past, verbs should be in past tense: 'got', 'went', 'had'. Also, 'during the younger' is incorrect; 'during my younger days' is appropriate. Tense consistency is important for clarity.

× I do eat the snacks which are not healthy like the biscuits, chips but only on an occasional basis, that is only on the once a month.

✓ I do eat snacks which are not healthy like biscuits and chips, but only occasionally, that is, only once a month.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before plural nouns when speaking generally. 'On the once a month' is incorrect; 'once a month' is correct. Also, 'on an occasional basis' can be simplified to 'occasionally'. Quantifiers and articles should be used correctly for natural English.