Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇表达压力和情绪。

예시: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or upset. Since I work in a demanding marketing department, snacking helps me relax during busy days.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且内容重复。建议使用正确的语法，避免重复，并清晰表达观点。

예시: I don't think eating snacks often is healthy because many snacks, like cake and ice cream, contain high sugar and calories. Therefore, I only eat them on special occasions.

제안: 回答中有语法和发音错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，注意时态和单复数，使用连词使表达更连贯。

예시: To be honest, I didn't often eat snacks when I was a child because my parents thought they were junk food. They preferred me to eat healthier options like fresh fruits and vegetables.

제안: 回答较自然，但有重复和小错误。建议注意单词拼写和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I really enjoy eating chocolate and cake, especially when I feel a bit down. I'm a big fan of sweet treats because sugary foods can comfort me and lift my mood. For example, I often eat dark chocolate after a long day to feel happier.

× Currently I'm working in the marketing department so I have a lot of the work to do.

✓ Currently I'm working in the marketing department so I have a lot of work to do.

“a lot of the work”中的“the”是不必要的，应该直接说“a lot of work”，表示大量的工作。

× I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or under pressured or or sometimes upset.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed, under pressure, or sometimes upset.

“under pressured”应为“under pressure”，因为“pressure”是名词，不能用形容词形式“pressured”。

× Actually I don't think it snakes very often is good for our healthy because the snacks like the cake, chocolate ice cream is high sugar, high sugar and high calories which is better for our healthy.

✓ Actually I don't think eating snacks very often is good for our health because snacks like cake and chocolate ice cream are high in sugar and calories, which is not good for our health.

“snakes”应为“snacks”；“healthy”应为“health”；“the cake, chocolate ice cream”应去掉定冠词“the”；“is high sugar”应改为“are high in sugar”；“which is better for our healthy”应改为“which is not good for our health”。

× So I don't usually eat snacks in the daily life just in some special moment.

✓ So I don't usually eat snacks in daily life, just on some special occasions.

“in the daily life”应为“in daily life”；“in some special moment”应为“on some special occasions”，因为“moment”通常不与“in”连用，且复数形式更合适。

× To be honest I don't usually eat snacks when I chilled a because my parents they think the snacks are junk food and if I eat too much it will bad for my health and tooth so they prefer I eat some free healthier food like fresh fresh fruit and vegetables.

✓ To be honest, I didn't usually eat snacks when I was a child because my parents thought snacks were junk food and if I ate too much it would be bad for my health and teeth, so they preferred I eat some healthier food like fresh fruit and vegetables.

“chilled a”应为“was a child”；时态应统一为过去时，如“didn't usually eat”，“thought”，“were”，“ate”，“would be”，“preferred”；“tooth”应为复数“teeth”；“free healthier food”中的“free”多余，应去掉。

× my parents they think the snacks are junk food

✓ my parents think snacks are junk food

“my parents they”中“they”多余，应去掉。

× I really like eating chocolate and cake, especially when I feel a bit down.

✓ I really like eating chocolate and cake, especially when I feel a bit down.

该句无明显单复数错误，保持原句。

× A big fan of sweet trees so I found that that have something sugary can comfort me and lift my mood.

✓ I'm a big fan of sweet treats, so I find that having something sugary can comfort me and lift my mood.

“sweet trees”应为“sweet treats”；“I found”应为现在时“I find”以符合语境；“that that have”应改为“that having”。

× For example, I often eat dark dark chocolate after a long day to feel happier.

✓ For example, I often eat dark chocolate after a long day to feel happier.

“dark dark chocolate”中“dark”重复，应去掉一个。