Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid filler phrases like 'and stuff like that'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon, between lunch and dinner. For example, I often choose fruits and nuts because they are healthy. However, sometimes I prefer chocolate or chips since they help me feel more energetic and focused.

제안: Focus on clarity and grammatical accuracy. Avoid vague phrases like 'some issues' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: I think whether eating snacks is healthy depends on the person and the time. For instance, if someone has health problems, they should avoid certain snacks like chocolate. Personally, I prefer to eat healthy snacks rather than chocolate.

제안: Avoid informal and unclear expressions. Use clear and concise sentences with proper grammar. Provide specific details and avoid filler phrases.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. I really loved having snacks and sometimes I would do anything to get them. Snacks were very important to me at that time.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and avoid hesitation. Use correct grammar and vocabulary. Provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words.

예시: These days, I prefer light and easy snacks. For example, I often choose Bueno chocolate sticks because they are delicious and not too heavy.

× Well, I normally have a snacks in the late afternoon, like between lunch and dinner.

✓ Well, I normally have snacks in the late afternoon, like between lunch and dinner.

The word 'snacks' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. 'A' is used only with singular countable nouns. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× Sometimes I feel like I need some chocolate or chips 'cause it gives me more energy and more focus and that's it.

✓ Sometimes I feel like I need some chocolate or chips because they give me more energy and more focus, and that's it.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'chocolate or chips', which is plural. Therefore, the plural pronoun 'they' should be used to agree with the plural subject.

× I say actually it depends on the time and the people who's eating.

✓ I say actually it depends on the time and the people who are eating.

The phrase 'people who's eating' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and requires the plural relative pronoun 'who' and plural verb 'are'. 'Who's' is a contraction of 'who is', which is singular.

× Like if you have some issues I might not prefer you to eat.

✓ Like if you have some issues, I might not prefer you to eat.

The sentence is grammatically correct in terms of singular/plural usage here. However, a comma is needed after 'issues' for clarity. No singular/plural error detected.

× If you have an issues with chocolate you don't need to eat.

✓ If you have an issue with chocolate, you don't need to eat.

The word 'issues' is plural, but the article 'an' is singular. 'An' should be used with singular nouns only. Changing 'issues' to singular 'issue' corrects the mismatch.

× But for me I feel to be healthy more than be chocolatey.

✓ But for me, I feel healthier than being chocolatey.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect structure. 'Feel to be healthy' is incorrect; 'feel healthier' is the correct comparative form. Also, 'be chocolatey' is awkward; 'being chocolatey' is better. Added a comma after 'for me' for clarity.

× When I was a child, I was eating a lot of snacks.

✓ When I was a child, I ate a lot of snacks.

The past continuous 'was eating' suggests an action in progress at a specific time, but here a simple past 'ate' is more appropriate to describe habitual past action.

× Like the best thing was like, Oh my God, how do you when I had you have a snack?

✓ The best thing was like, 'Oh my God, when I had a snack.'

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. Simplifying and correcting the sentence structure clarifies the meaning. Removed unnecessary words and corrected tense and phrasing.

× That's a big thing, which is like I might do everything to have this snack.

✓ That was a big thing; I might do anything to have that snack.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'Which is like' is unnecessary. 'Might do everything' is better expressed as 'might do anything'. Also, 'this snack' changed to 'that snack' for consistency.

× OK, these days are my prefer something easy and like not that heavy.

✓ OK, these days I prefer something easy and not that heavy.

The phrase 'these days are my prefer' is incorrect. 'Prefer' is a verb and should be used with a subject and object properly. Corrected to 'I prefer'.

× Like I might go for bueno, which is kinda like this is too chocolate.

✓ Like I might go for Bueno, which is kind of like this chocolate bar.

'kinda like this is too chocolate' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Kind of like this chocolate bar' is clearer. Also, 'Bueno' is a proper noun and should be capitalized.

× What do you what do you call it? Do chocolate sticks?

✓ What do you call it? Chocolate sticks?

The sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. Simplifying to 'What do you call it? Chocolate sticks?' improves clarity.