Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repeating the same idea twice, like mentioning 'focus on one thing' two times. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because it helps me stay calm and concentrate while studying. For example, I often eat fruits and nuts, which keep me energized and focused during my study sessions.

제안: Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy, like 'I find them very tasty for me and I love them'. Also, use linking words such as 'because' to explain reasons more clearly.

예시: I think snacks can be healthy or unhealthy depending on what you choose. Because I have diabetes, I prefer healthy snacks like fruits and nuts, which are tasty and good for my health.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and unclear phrases such as 'AF if I speak'. Also, organize your answer with clear linking words to make it easier to follow.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, my dad gave me snacks at the end of the day if I spoke English all day. This was a fun challenge and it helped me improve my English, which I am very thankful for.

제안: Try to avoid confusing phrases like 'I afford sugary treats'. Use clearer expressions and linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons.

예시: I enjoy eating fruits and nuts because they are naturally sweet and healthy. Since I have diabetes, I avoid sugary treats, but fruits like almonds and apples satisfy my cravings for sweets.

× I afford sugary treats, but fruits still satisfy my needs or my cravings for sugar and other sweets.

✓ I can't afford sugary treats, but fruits still satisfy my needs or my cravings for sugar and other sweets.

The original sentence uses 'I afford' incorrectly. The correct modal verb phrase is 'I can't afford' to express inability to pay for sugary treats. This is a common modal verb usage error.

× it's important for a health so I should think for my health too.

✓ it's important for health so I should think about my health too.

The phrase 'for a health' is incorrect because 'health' is an uncountable noun and does not require the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'think for my health' should be 'think about my health' to use the correct preposition.

× it's important for a health so I should think for my health too.

✓ it's important for health so I should think about my health too.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'think'. The correct preposition is 'about' when referring to considering or paying attention to something.

× And it was a little fun challenge and it was very helpful because it helped me improve my English and I be I know I'll be forever thankful for that.

✓ And it was a little fun challenge and it was very helpful because it helped me improve my English and I know I'll be forever thankful for that.

The phrase 'I be I know' is incorrect. The correct form is 'I know'. This is a past tense issue where an unnecessary verb form is inserted.