Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁自然。建议减少重复，注意语法，使用连贯的句子表达情绪和原因。

예시: I usually eat snacks when I'm feeling stressed or down because they help improve my mood and make me feel better.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，内容重复且不连贯。建议理清思路，使用正确的语法表达观点，并用连词连接句子。

예시: I don't think snacks are very healthy because they lack nutrients, but eating something sweet can boost our mood when we're feeling down.

제안: 语法错误较多，表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议练习时态和主谓一致，简洁明了地描述过去的习惯。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I lacked self-control and sometimes ate too much without my parents' guidance.

제안: 表达中有语法和用词错误，句子不够流畅。建议使用正确的短语和连词，清晰表达喜好和原因。

예시: Chocolate is the first snack that comes to my mind because it's sweet and always cheers me up when I'm feeling down.

× I would go for eating snacks to to reduce my stress and cheer and it never fails to cheer me up and make my day.

✓ I would go for eating snacks to reduce my stress and cheer up; it never fails to cheer me up and make my day.

这里“go for eating snacks”中的“go for”后面不应该接动名词形式，应该直接用不定式“to reduce”来表达目的。同时“cheer”后面缺少宾语，应该用“cheer up”表示使人振作。

× they are not rich in nutritions, but sweet is a good mood enhancer for us.

✓ they are not rich in nutrition, but sweets are good mood enhancers for us.

“nutrition”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式“nutritions”。“sweet”应使用复数形式“sweets”表示零食类，且谓语动词应与复数主语一致。

× So if we don't in a mood, I think some snacks can reduce our surprise, cheer me up and make us stay.

✓ So if we are not in a good mood, I think some snacks can reduce our stress, cheer me up and help us stay positive.

“don't in a mood”缺少动词，应为“are not in a mood”。“surprise”用词错误，应为“stress”表示压力。句子结构和表达需要调整使其更通顺。

× When I'm when I'm young I'm lack of self-control.

✓ When I was young, I lacked self-control.

描述过去的情况时，动词时态应使用过去式，“I'm”应改为“I was”，“lack”应改为“lacked”。

× if I'm not, I was not under the proper guidance from my parents, I would have some bad behaviors.

✓ if I was not under the proper guidance from my parents, I would have some bad behaviors.

句中“if I'm not”时态混乱，应统一为过去时“if I was not”。

× I I were addicted to eating snacks.

✓ I was addicted to eating snacks.

主语“I”应与动词“was”搭配，不能用“were”。

× Chocolate is a first coming to my mind, it's sweet and every time I'm not in good mood I would definitely go to the chocolate say.

✓ Chocolate is the first thing that comes to my mind; it's sweet and every time I'm not in a good mood, I would definitely go for chocolate.

“a first coming to my mind”表达错误，应为“the first thing that comes to my mind”。“go to the chocolate say”表达不正确，应为“go for chocolate”。

× every time I'm not in good mood I would definitely go to the chocolate say.

✓ every time I'm not in a good mood, I would definitely go for chocolate.

“go to the chocolate say”中的介词使用错误，应使用“go for”表示选择某物。