Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I usually don't eat snacks because I think they are unhealthy and dry. However, sometimes I eat a small piece when my sister offers me some.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại ý và từ ngữ, đồng thời cần sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn. Hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn.

예시: I don't think snacks are healthy because they usually contain a lot of oil and flour. Therefore, I try to avoid eating them.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói đúng ý muốn truyền đạt.

예시: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was young because my parents often bought them for me. As a result, I gained weight, which was not good for my health.

제안: Bạn nên tránh nói lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, có cấu trúc tốt và dùng từ phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

예시: I like many Vietnamese snacks, but I especially enjoy American snacks like Lay's potato chips and crisps because they are very tasty and flavorful.

× To be honest, absolutely I don't want to eat snack anymore because it's really dry and it's fast food so I think it's not good for my health.

✓ To be honest, I absolutely don't want to eat snacks anymore because they're really dry and they're fast food, so I think they're not good for my health.

The modal verb 'absolutely' is incorrectly placed; it should modify 'don't want' properly. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context. 'It's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'snacks'.

× To be honest, absolutely I don't want to eat snack anymore because it's really dry and it's fast food so I think it's not good for my health.

✓ To be honest, I absolutely don't want to eat snacks anymore because they're really dry and they're fast food, so I think they're not good for my health.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to snacks in general. The pronouns 'it's' should be 'they're' to agree with the plural noun 'snacks'.

× But sometimes when my sister, she wants to eat snacks so I just bought for her and when she asked me to try, I try maybe just a piece of snack.

✓ But sometimes when my sister wants to eat snacks, I just buy them for her, and when she asks me to try, I try maybe just a piece of snack.

The pronoun 'she' is redundant after 'my sister'. The verb tense should be consistent in present tense 'wants', 'buy', 'asks', 'try'. Also, 'bought' should be 'buy' to match present tense. 'A piece of snack' is acceptable but could be 'a piece of a snack' or 'a snack'.

× But sometimes when my sister, she wants to eat snacks so I just bought for her and when she asked me to try, I try maybe just a piece of snack.

✓ But sometimes when my sister wants to eat snacks, I just buy them for her, and when she asks me to try, I try maybe just a piece of a snack.

The plural noun 'snacks' requires the pronoun 'them' instead of omitting it. Also, 'a piece of snack' is better as 'a piece of a snack' to specify a portion.

× As I mentioned, because I think snack is a fast food so it's not good for my health.

✓ As I mentioned, I think snacks are fast food, so they're not good for my health.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to refer generally. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'It's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'snacks'.

× It is dry and unhealthy umm cuisines.

✓ They are dry and unhealthy foods.

'Cuisines' is not appropriate here; 'foods' fits better. Also, 'umm' is a filler and should be omitted. 'It is' should be 'They are' to agree with plural 'foods'.

× So I don't usually eat snack because I it has a lot of oils in it and flour so it's not good for my.

✓ So I don't usually eat snacks because they have a lot of oil and flour in them, so they're not good for me.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'It has' should be 'they have' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'Oils' is better as 'oil' in singular when referring to the substance generally. 'It's not good for my' is incomplete; should be 'they're not good for me'.

× Yes, of course, when I was young, I ate lots of snacks and my mom, my dad just kept go buying for me.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was young, I ate lots of snacks and my mom and dad just kept buying them for me.

'Just kept go buying' is incorrect; correct form is 'just kept buying'. Also, 'my mom, my dad' should be 'my mom and dad'.

× So actually according to five or six years, I ate lots of sex is make me become more fatter, become fatter and it's a bad.

✓ So actually, for about five or six years, I ate lots of snacks which made me become fatter, and it's bad.

'According to five or six years' is incorrect; 'for about five or six years' is correct. 'Sex' is a typo for 'snacks'. 'Is make me become more fatter' is incorrect; correct is 'which made me become fatter'. 'More fatter' is redundant; 'fatter' suffices.

× Yeah, actually I like a lot of snack from Vietnam, but actually I just want to eat.

✓ Yeah, actually I like a lot of snacks from Vietnam, but actually I just want to eat them.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'them' clarifies the object.

× I really like the snack from America, like lies and your potato chips and crisps.

✓ I really like snacks from America, like Lays and your potato chips and crisps.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Lies' is a misspelling of 'Lays' (brand). 'Your' is incorrect; should be 'your' only if addressing the listener's chips, otherwise 'their' or omit. Here, better to say 'potato chips and crisps'.

× They really delicious and have lots of flavor.

✓ They are really delicious and have lots of flavor.

The verb 'are' is missing before 'really delicious'.