Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了主要观点，但语言有些不自然，且存在语法错误，如“more freshing”应为“fresher”。建议注意形容词的正确形式，并简化句子结构，使表达更流畅自然。

예시: I usually don't eat snacks these days because I prefer eating fruit. I find fruit healthier and fresher, so I often have it as an afternoon snack in my daily routine.

제안: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，如“if the snacks has”应为“if the snacks have”，且句子不完整。建议避免重复，注意主谓一致，并补充完整的观点，使表达更清晰。

예시: Personally, I think it depends on the type of snacks. If the snacks contain healthy ingredients, they can be good for us. However, snacks with many unhealthy substances are not suitable to eat.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“be allow and was allowed”重复且错误。建议简化句子，注意时态和语法，确保表达准确。

예시: No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my family had strict rules. I was only allowed to eat snacks on weekends.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“contains less sugary”应为“contain less sugar”，“keep my feet”应为“keep fit”。建议注意词汇的正确使用和句子结构，表达更准确。

예시: I prefer snacks that are less sweet and contain less sugar because I strictly control my diet to stay fit. Also, I don't like the taste and smell of sugary snacks.

× I found the fruit is much healthier and more freshing, so I prefer to eat them like afternoon snack in my daily routines.

✓ I found the fruit is much healthier and fresher, so I prefer to eat them as an afternoon snack in my daily routine.

这里“freshing”是错误的词形，正确的形容词是“fresher”，表示“更新鲜”。另外，“like afternoon snack”应改为“as an afternoon snack”，表示“作为下午的零食”。“daily routines”应为单数“daily routine”，表示日常习惯。

× If the snacks, if the snacks has a healthy healthy ingredients maybe it's very suitable for us to eat.

✓ If the snacks have healthy ingredients, maybe they're very suitable for us to eat.

主语“snacks”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“have”而非“has”。“healthy healthy ingredients”重复，应去掉一个“healthy”。

× But if they have many non nutrient substance.

✓ But if they have many non-nutrient substances, they are not good for us.

原句为不完整句，缺少主句。应补充完整句子，使表达完整。

× No, I didn't often eat the snacks when I was a young girl because, you know, my family had strict rules to eat and snacks.

✓ No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was a young girl because, you know, my family had strict rules about eating snacks.

“the snacks”前不需要定冠词“the”，因为泛指零食。短语“rules to eat and snacks”结构不正确，应改为“rules about eating snacks”，表示“关于吃零食的规则”。

× So I had to obey these rules and be allow and was allowed to eat them in weekends.

✓ So I had to obey these rules and was allowed to eat them on weekends.

“be allow”是错误形式，应删除。并且“in weekends”应改为“on weekends”，表示“在周末”。

× Well I prefer to eat some snacks which are less sweet and contains less sugary because I strictly control my diet and I want to keep my feet.

✓ Well, I prefer to eat some snacks which are less sweet and contain less sugar because I strictly control my diet and I want to keep my figure.

“contains”应改为复数形式“contain”，因为主语是复数“snacks”。“less sugary”应改为“less sugar”，因为“sugar”是名词。最后“keep my feet”应为“keep my figure”，意为保持身材。

× Also the sugary makes me not very comfortable because its taste and smell I didn't like.

✓ Also, the sugar makes me feel uncomfortable because I don't like its taste and smell.

“the sugary”应为“the sugar”，形容词误用为名词。表达“makes me not very comfortable”不自然，应改为“makes me feel uncomfortable”。“I didn't like”时态不对，应与前文保持一致用现在时“don't like”。