Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors to sound more natural.

예시: I usually eat snacks every day, especially during my final exams. For example, when I study for a long time, I take a break and eat some snacks to reduce my stress and feel more cheerful.

제안: Focus on giving a clear opinion first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to improve clarity and naturalness.

예시: I don't think most snacks are healthy because many are processed. However, I prefer organic snacks since they are better for my body and overall health.

제안: Make sure to answer directly and use correct verb tenses. Add specific details with linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Fortunately, my parents didn't stop me from enjoying them, so I had a wonderful childhood.

제안: Be specific and clear about your preferences. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases. Also, correct grammar will help your answer sound natural.

예시: I usually buy Snapline candy and potato chips from convenience stores. However, I also prefer to eat healthy snacks like fruits to maintain a balanced diet.

× I definitely love to eat snacks like every day especially during this period I taking my final exam and feel more cheerful and then when I study half I will eat some snack to reduce my stress.

✓ I definitely love to eat snacks like every day especially during this period I am taking my final exam and feel more cheerful and then when I study halfway I will eat some snacks to reduce my stress.

The verb 'taking' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly. Also, 'study half' is unclear and should be 'study halfway' to indicate partial study time. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context of eating some quantity of snacks.

× Not really 'cause, uh, now more of the snack is taking a manufacturing process and I suggest you prefer to eat the organic snack because it's more healthy to your body and your life.

✓ Not really because, uh, now most snacks go through a manufacturing process and I suggest you prefer to eat organic snacks because they are healthier for your body and your life.

The phrase 'more of the snack is taking a manufacturing process' is incorrect; it should be 'most snacks go through a manufacturing process'. Also, 'more healthy to your body' should be 'healthier for your body'. Prepositions 'to' and 'of' are incorrectly used here.

× Yes, of course, I often snap when I'm young and I appreciate my parents will not always avoid me to eat less, so I have a wonderful childhood when I'm young.

✓ Yes, of course, I often ate snacks when I was young and I appreciate that my parents did not always stop me from eating too much, so I had a wonderful childhood.

The verb 'snap' should be past tense 'ate snacks' to match 'when I was young'. 'I'm young' should be past tense 'I was young'. 'Will not always avoid me to eat less' is incorrect; it should be 'did not always stop me from eating too much'. The tense consistency is important here.

× I always buy Snapline candy and potato chips in the convenience shop and for healthy I also would prefer to eat some food to become a healthy snack in my life.

✓ I always buy Snapline candy and potato chips at the convenience shop and for health, I also prefer to eat some healthy snacks in my life.

'In the convenience shop' should be 'at the convenience shop' (preposition correction). 'For healthy' should be 'for health'. 'Some food to become a healthy snack' is unclear; it should be 'some healthy snacks'. The plural form 'snacks' fits better here.