Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构较为混乱，建议简化句子，避免重复和语法错误，使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: I usually avoid eating snacks now because I'm on a strict diet. However, when I feel very stressed, I sometimes have a small amount to help me relax.

제안: 回答内容较为模糊，表达不够清晰，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，具体说明健康零食的种类和原因。

예시: I believe it depends on the type of snacks. For example, snacks made from natural ingredients like real potatoes can be healthy, especially for people on strict diets.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够连贯，建议简化句子，注意时态和主谓一致，增强表达的流畅性。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my mom would buy many for us after class. This made my childhood very happy.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用简洁明了的句子，避免重复和错误，清楚表达喜欢的零食及原因。

예시: I like all kinds of snacks, especially chocolate. Even though I'm on a strict diet, I can still enjoy some dark chocolate because it doesn't affect my diet and makes me feel happy.

× Since I got a strict diet recently so I don't really get a lot of chance to eat the snacks especially I will forbid myself from oh like kind of food.

✓ Since I got a strict diet recently, I don't really get a lot of chances to eat snacks, especially because I forbid myself from those kinds of food.

句子中使用了两个连词“Since”和“so”，导致句子结构混乱。应去掉“so”，并调整句子结构，使其更通顺。

× I don't really get a lot of chance to eat the snacks especially I will forbid myself from oh like kind of food.

✓ I don't really get a lot of chances to eat snacks, especially because I forbid myself from those kinds of food.

“forbid myself from oh like kind of food”中“oh like kind of food”表达不准确，应改为“those kinds of food”表示“那些种类的食物”。

× But if when I was very stressed out I would definitely try a little bit because that will let me feel relaxed from counseling.

✓ But when I was very stressed out, I would definitely try a little bit because that would let me feel relaxed after counseling.

“that will let me feel relaxed from counseling”时态不一致，应使用过去时“would”，并且“from counseling”应改为“after counseling”更符合表达习惯。

× Recently many people are following strict diets so they will consume some some snacks that was that was made of some original food that the real potato or something.

✓ Recently many people are following strict diets, so they consume some snacks that are made of original food like real potatoes or something.

“snacks that was”中“snacks”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。

× so they will consume some some snacks that was that was made of some original food that the real potato or something.

✓ so they consume some snacks that are made of original food like real potatoes or something.

“some some”重复，应去掉一个“some”；“some original food that the real potato”表达不清，应改为“original food like real potatoes”。

× I think the kind of snacks are quite healthy.

✓ I think this kind of snack is quite healthy.

“kind of snacks”应为单数形式“kind of snack”，谓语动词也应为单数“is”。

× Yeah, I, I often eat snacks when I when I was young because my mom will purchase a lot of snacks that she think maybe we want to have some something after class because children are always very starving and that makes me a happy childhood.

✓ Yeah, I often ate snacks when I was young because my mom would purchase a lot of snacks that she thought we might want to have after class because children are always very hungry, and that made me have a happy childhood.

描述过去的事情应使用过去时态，如“ate”、“would purchase”、“thought”、“might want”、“made”；“very starving”表达错误，应改为“very hungry”。

× because children are always very starving and that makes me a happy childhood.

✓ because children are always very hungry, and that made me have a happy childhood.

“starving”是动词的现在分词，不能用作形容词，应使用形容词“hungry”；“makes me a happy childhood”表达不当，应改为“made me have a happy childhood”。

× I love all kinds of snacks, especially chocolate since you when as now I'm following the strict diet, I can still have some dog chocolate that doesn't that doesn't ruin my diet but also provide me with a happy mood and also chocolate was was big.

✓ I love all kinds of snacks, especially chocolate. Since now I'm following a strict diet, I can still have some dark chocolate that doesn't ruin my diet but also provides me with a happy mood. Also, chocolate was big.

句子结构混乱，缺少标点，且“dog chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”；“that doesn't that doesn't”重复，应去掉一个；“provide”应为第三人称单数“provides”；“chocolate was was big”重复，应去掉一个“was”。