Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中时态混乱，且表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性，使用更自然的表达方式，并避免语法错误。

예시: I usually eat snacks while working because I find that brainstorming requires a lot of energy, so having a snack helps me stay focused.

제안: 表达有些冗长且语法不准确，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法和词汇的准确使用。

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because I have stomach problems that get worse when I eat them, but sometimes it's hard to resist.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免重复和口语化的填充词。

예시: Yes, my mother told me that when I was young, I ate a lot of chocolate almost every day, sometimes five pieces a day, which was quite excessive.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，清晰描述喜好并避免语法错误。

예시: When I was young, I loved eating chocolate because of its sweet taste. Now, I prefer salty snacks like chips and nuts, which I think are healthier.

× I always eat snack when I was working because I think working is a brainstorming event so I need to have it to fulfill my energy.

✓ I always ate snacks when I was working because I think working is a brainstorming event so I need to have them to fulfill my energy.

句子中描述过去的动作，应使用过去时态。'eat'应改为过去式'ate'。另外，'snack'应为复数形式'snacks'，因为表示不止一个零食。

× I always eat snack when I was working because I think working is a brainstorming event so I need to have it to fulfill my energy.

✓ I always ate snacks when I was working because I think working is a brainstorming event so I need to have them to fulfill my energy.

'snack'应使用复数形式'snacks'，因为这里指的是零食的总称。代词'it'应改为'them'，与复数名词保持一致。

× No, I don't think it is really healthy to me because I have a lot of stomach problems that make me feel hurt when I eat a sack of snacks, but sometimes it's just difficult to control to eat them.

✓ No, I don't think it is really healthy for me because I have a lot of stomach problems that make me feel pain when I eat a sack of snacks, but sometimes it's just difficult to control eating them.

'to me'应改为'for me'，表示对某人健康的影响。'feel hurt'表达不准确，应改为'feel pain'。'control to eat them'结构错误，应改为'control eating them'。

× No, I don't think it is really healthy to me because I have a lot of stomach problems that make me feel hurt when I eat a sack of snacks, but sometimes it's just difficult to control to eat them.

✓ No, I don't think it is really healthy for me because I have a lot of stomach problems that make me feel pain when I eat a sack of snacks, but sometimes it's just difficult to control eating them.

'a sack of snacks'中的'snacks'应为复数，'sack'是单数，整体表达合理。

× Yes, according to my mother's word when I was young I eat so much chocolate and my mom said that I just can't control myself and just eat them every day.

✓ Yes, according to my mother's words, when I was young I ate so much chocolate and my mom said that I just couldn't control myself and just ate them every day.

描述过去的动作，应使用过去时态，'eat'改为'ate'，'can't'改为'couldn't'，'eat'改为'ate'。

× Yes, according to my mother's word when I was young I eat so much chocolate and my mom said that I just can't control myself and just eat them every day.

✓ Yes, according to my mother's words, when I was young I ate so much chocolate and my mom said that I just couldn't control myself and just ate them every day.

'mother's word'应为复数形式'mother's words'，表示母亲的话语。

× It's about 5 days, 5-5 pics a day and it's really, uh, crazy things but.

✓ It was about 5 days, 5-5 pieces a day and it was really, uh, crazy things.

'pics'应为'pieces'，表示数量单位。'It's'应改为过去时'It was'，与上下文时态一致。

× It's about 5 days, 5-5 pics a day and it's really, uh, crazy things but.

✓ It was about 5 days, 5-5 pieces a day and it was really, uh, crazy things.

描述过去的情况，'It's'应改为过去时'It was'。

× When I was young I really like to eat chocolate because I really love the sweet taste and I just can't control to eat it.

✓ When I was young I really liked to eat chocolate because I really loved the sweet taste and I just couldn't control eating it.

描述过去的动作，'like'和'love'应改为过去式'liked'和'loved'。'can't control to eat it'结构错误，应改为'couldn't control eating it'。

× When I was young I really like to eat chocolate because I really love the sweet taste and I just can't control to eat it.

✓ When I was young I really liked to eat chocolate because I really loved the sweet taste and I just couldn't control eating it.

'control to eat'结构不正确，'control'后应接动名词形式，改为'control eating'。

× But when I grow up I'm more like salt or flavor like chips and also likes nuts that can make my house more well.

✓ But when I grew up, I liked salty or flavored snacks like chips and also liked nuts that can make my health better.

描述过去成长过程，应使用过去时态，'grow'改为'grew'，'like'改为'liked'。'salt or flavor like chips'表达不清，应改为'salty or flavored snacks like chips'。'make my house more well'表达错误，应改为'make my health better'。