Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了吃零食的时间和原因，但句子结构稍显简单，且“release the burden of heavy workload”表达不够自然。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed, especially during working hours, because they help me relax and recharge my energy.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误，如“snacks always high in sugar”缺少动词，且“It's unhealthy for me to go on a diet”表达不清。建议注意语法准确性，表达更清晰，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

예시: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they are usually high in sugar, salt, and fat. Since I'm a bit overweight, I try to avoid them to maintain a healthy diet.

제안: 回答中有语法错误，如“thought it this was unhealthy for child”，表达不够准确。建议改进句子结构，使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my parents believed that snacks were unhealthy for children.

제안: 回答中“although it could satisfy my teeth, my sweet tooth”表达不清且语法错误。建议简化表达，使用更自然的句子，并注意逻辑连贯。

예시: I enjoy eating chocolate as a snack because it's tasty and convenient, and it satisfies my sweet tooth.

× I usually eat snacks when I feel stressful, especially during working hours.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed, especially during working hours.

这里的形容词应为"stressed"，表示感到压力，而不是"stressful"，后者表示令人感到压力。应使用过去分词作形容词，表示人的感受。

× Snacking helps me release the burden of heavy workload.

✓ Snacking helps me release the burden of a heavy workload.

"workload"前应加不定冠词"a"，表示一份工作量。缺少冠词导致表达不完整。

× However, snacks always high in sugar, salt and fat.

✓ However, snacks are always high in sugar, salt and fat.

句子缺少系动词"are"，导致句子结构不完整。应加上"are"来连接主语和表语。

× It's unhealthy for me to go on a diet.

✓ It's unhealthy for me to eat snacks.

原句意思不清，前文讨论零食不健康，后半句"go on a diet"与前文逻辑不符，应改为"eat snacks"以表达吃零食不健康。

× No, when I was a child I was not allowed to eat snacks because my parents thought it this was unhealthy for child.

✓ No, when I was a child I was not allowed to eat snacks because my parents thought this was unhealthy for children.

"it this"重复且错误，应去掉"it"。"child"应为复数形式"children"，表示一般意义上的孩子。

× I enjoy eating chocolate as a refreshment because it's tasty and convenient, although it could satisfy my teeth, my sweet tooth.

✓ I enjoy eating chocolate as a refreshment because it's tasty and convenient, and it satisfies my sweet tooth.

"although"用法不当，且"satisfy my teeth"表达错误，应为"satisfies my sweet tooth"，表示满足甜食欲望。句子应使用"and"连接，表达正面原因。