Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时表达不够自然，句子较长且有重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且使用更地道的表达方式。

예시: I rarely eat snacks nowadays because my mum says they are bad for health, and I often get stomach aches if I eat them.

제안: 回答中出现了逻辑错误（说不健康却说有帮助），且有重复和语法错误。建议明确表达观点，避免重复，并用连贯的句子表达原因。

예시: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually contain a lot of sugar and fat, which can lead to diseases like obesity and diabetes.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，避免重复，并清楚说明原因。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they helped me relax and improved my mood.

제안: 回答不完整且表达混乱，句子结构不清晰，建议完整表达想法，避免语法错误，并使用连贯的句子。

예시: I like sweet snacks, especially chocolate, because I have a sweet tooth. Eating sweets usually lifts my mood, especially when I feel down. However, I try to limit them now to stay healthy.

× Well currently I seldom eat snacks because my mum always told me that eating snacks can be detrimental to our health and also I always have a stomach ache in my spare time so eating snacks can be detrimental for my stomach.

✓ Well currently I seldom eat snacks because my mum always tells me that eating snacks can be detrimental to our health and also I always have a stomach ache in my spare time so eating snacks can be detrimental for my stomach.

这里的“told”使用了过去时，但句子表达的是现在的习惯或事实，应该用一般现在时“tells”。

× No, definitely. As I said before I believe that eating snacks can be quite helpful for our body and health conditions as it always has high sugar and high fat which can which can cause some chronic diseases like obesity and diabetes.

✓ No, definitely not. As I said before, I believe that eating snacks can be quite harmful to our body and health conditions as they always have high sugar and high fat which can cause some chronic diseases like obesity and diabetes.

句中“helpful”与后文描述的高糖高脂及慢性病不符，语义错误，应改为“harmful”。另外，“which can which can”重复，应删去重复部分。

× Yes, sure, when I was younger I would like to eat some snacks to unwind and also enhance my mood because snacks always can always make me more watering at that moment.

✓ Yes, sure, when I was younger I would like eating some snacks to unwind and also enhance my mood because snacks can always make my mouth water at that moment.

“would like to eat”在过去习惯表达中应改为“would like eating”更自然；“make me more watering”表达错误，应为“make my mouth water”。

× Well, there are plenty of snacks that I would like to eat, especially for the sugar and chocolate because I have a tooth. I have sweet tooth and eating sweet food can always significantly enhance my mood, especially when I have a sense of depression. But I don't really eat more nowadays because I need to control my.

✓ Well, there are plenty of snacks that I would like to eat, especially sugar and chocolate because I have a sweet tooth and eating sweet food can always significantly enhance my mood, especially when I feel depressed. But I don't really eat much nowadays because I need to control myself.

“a tooth”应为“a sweet tooth”，表示“爱吃甜食”；“sweet tooth”前缺少冠词“a”；“have a sense of depression”表达不自然，改为“feel depressed”；“eat more”应改为“eat much”；句末不完整，补充“control myself”。