Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I usually eat snacks while studying or reading because they help me regain energy and improve my concentration.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and organise your ideas logically using linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

예시: I think snacks can be both healthy and unhealthy. On one hand, they help me regain energy, but on the other hand, oily snacks are not good for health, so I try to be careful about what I eat.

제안: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often preferred eating snacks when I was young because they helped me regain energy and concentrate better while studying or reading.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more specific and better structured. Avoid vague phrases like 'any type of food' and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary relevant to the topic.

예시: I like to eat snacks such as biscuits and apples because they help me recharge my energy during study breaks and improve my concentration.

× I usually eat snacks whenever I am reading books or studying because at that time when I eat snacks I can receive my energy back and it help me to focus on my study.

✓ I usually eat snacks whenever I am reading books or studying because at that time when I eat snacks I can receive my energy back and it helps me to focus on my study.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue where the verb must match the subject in number and person.

× I have both expect yes or no because snacks help me to receive my energy get back but if we see it on the other expect is that it some snacks are that are prepared in the oil and oily foods are unhealthy for human so that I am and I am health conscious.

✓ I have both perspectives, yes and no, because snacks help me to get my energy back but if we see it from the other perspective, some snacks are prepared in oil and oily foods are unhealthy for humans, so I am health conscious.

The pronouns and expressions like 'expect' are incorrectly used. 'Expect' should be 'perspective' and 'human' should be plural 'humans'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun use.

× I often give more preference to eat snacks when I was young and as I only mentioned, snacks help me to regain my energy cut back and it is very helpful for me to focus on my study or reading books.

✓ I often gave more preference to eating snacks when I was young and as I mentioned, snacks helped me to regain my energy and it was very helpful for me to focus on my study or reading books.

The verb tense should be past tense 'gave' and 'helped' to match the time frame 'when I was young'. Also, 'give preference to eat' should be 'gave preference to eating' for correct verb form after 'preference'.

× When I am reading books or studying, I give more preference to it.

✓ When I am reading books or studying, I give more preference to them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural activities 'reading books or studying'. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural antecedents.

× The snacks like biscuits, apple, any type of food, I give more preference to eat them because as I already mentioned, they help me to recharge my energy during study breaks and help me to easier concentrate and stay focused.

✓ The snacks like biscuits, apples, any type of food, I give more preference to eating them because, as I already mentioned, they help me to recharge my energy during study breaks and help me to concentrate more easily and stay focused.

'Apple' should be plural 'apples' to match the plural list of snacks. Also, 'give preference to eat' should be 'give preference to eating' for correct verb form. 'Easier concentrate' is corrected to 'concentrate more easily' for proper adverb use.