Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific details using linking words. For example, say when you usually eat snacks or if you avoid them, and explain why with clear reasons.

예시: I usually avoid eating snacks now because I want to maintain a healthy body. Instead, I prefer to eat vegetables during my free time, which helps me stay fit and energized.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why snacks are unhealthy.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually lack essential nutrients. Moreover, eating too many snacks can cause weight gain over time.

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit confusing. Try to give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or memories with linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I had more freedom to choose what I wanted. These memories are very special to me and motivate me to stay positive.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammar mistakes. Try to answer directly what snacks you like, then add details about when or why you eat them, using linking words for coherence.

예시: Honestly, I don't have much patience for eating snacks. Usually, I prefer to eat a salad during my free time. However, if I have the chance, I enjoy having snacks with my friends to strengthen our friendship.

× So I don't usually having snacks.

✓ So I don't usually have snacks.

The verb 'do' is an auxiliary verb and should be followed by the base form of the main verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'having' should be corrected to 'have'.

× Instead of that I tend to have vegetables in my free time and for example, I will umm.

✓ Instead of that, I tend to eat vegetables in my free time; for example, I will...

The verb 'have' can mean 'eat' but 'eat' is more appropriate here. Also, a comma is needed after 'Instead of that' for clarity, and 'for example' should be separated properly to improve sentence flow.

× It is definitely not mainly because when having snakes it will not provides you enough nutrients as well as may make you become fat and fatter over and over the year.

✓ It is definitely not, mainly because when having snacks it will not provide you enough nutrients and may make you become fatter over the years.

After 'will', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'provides' should be 'provide'. Also, 'snakes' is a typo for 'snacks'. The phrase 'over and over the year' is awkward and should be 'over the years'.

× when having snakes it will not provides you enough nutrients

✓ when having snacks it will not provide you enough nutrients

The word 'snakes' is incorrect here; it should be 'snacks' which is plural and appropriate for the context.

× I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was young. Umm, this is because when I was young, I will have I would have more freedom to do whatever I want, which is a really good memories and always become the big motivation for me to keep my chin up and keep moving forward in the future.

✓ I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was young. Umm, this is because when I was young, I had more freedom to do whatever I wanted, which are really good memories and always became a big motivation for me to keep my chin up and keep moving forward in the future.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Will have' should be past tense 'had', 'do' should be 'did' or 'wanted' to match past context. 'Memories' is plural, so 'is' should be 'are'. 'Become' should be past tense 'became' to match the past context.

× which is a really good memories

✓ which are really good memories

'Memories' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is', and 'really' correctly modifies 'good'.

× To be an to be honest I am not a person who have a huge patient for eating snacks.

✓ To be honest, I am not a person who has a huge patience for eating snacks.

'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'person'. Also, 'patient' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'patience'. The phrase 'To be an to be honest' is redundant and should be 'To be honest'.

× if I have a opportunity I will have a snack with my friends

✓ if I have an opportunity, I will have a snack with my friends

'Opportunity' begins with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an' instead of 'a'. Also, a comma after the conditional clause improves readability.

× to what are the so-called friends as well as tighten the close knit.

✓ to what are the so-called friends, as well as to tighten the close-knit bond.

The phrase is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Adding 'to' before 'tighten' and hyphenating 'close-knit' as an adjective clarifies the meaning. Also, 'bond' is added to complete the phrase logically.