Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but needs improvement in grammar and vocabulary to sound more natural. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'provides me feelings of relaxed', say 'helps me feel relaxed'.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the evening because they help me feel relaxed after a long, hectic day. For instance, light snacks like fruits and nuts recharge my energy and refresh me.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains some unclear words and repetition. Use precise vocabulary and avoid repeating 'healthy'. Also, use linking words to organize your answer better.

예시: I think eating snacks can be very healthy because they provide energy. For example, nuts and other light foods supply important vitamins and minerals that benefit our diet.

제안: Your answer repeats phrases and has grammatical errors. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, organize your answer with linking words to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I remember my mother used to give me healthy snacks like fruits after school, which were very nutritious. I really liked that habit because it was good for my health.

제안: Your answer is unclear and includes unnecessary questions and phrases. Avoid asking the examiner questions and focus on answering clearly. Use correct expressions and linking words to explain your preferences.

예시: I usually prefer snacks like fruits and nuts because they provide energy. For example, eating almonds or apples daily is said to keep the doctor away, which shows how healthy these snacks are.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening because it provides me feelings of relaxed after a long hectic day.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening because it provides me feelings of relaxation after a long hectic day.

The word 'relaxed' is an adjective, but here a noun 'relaxation' is needed to correctly express the feeling. Using 'relaxation' instead of 'relaxed' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× For example, the light snacks like fruits and nuts helps me to be recharged and all of me.

✓ For example, light snacks like fruits and nuts help me to be recharged and energize all of me.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' instead of 'helps'. Also, 'all of me' is unclear; 'energize all of me' clarifies the meaning.

× As I think eating snacks can be very healthy because it helps to energize us and some of the foods like knolls and other healthy light foods are very healthy for our dietary purpose and provides supplements like vitamins and minerals.

✓ I think eating snacks can be very healthy because they help to energize us, and some foods like nuts and other healthy light foods are very good for our dietary purposes and provide supplements like vitamins and minerals.

The plural subject 'snacks' requires the plural verb 'help'. 'Knolls' is a typo and should be 'nuts'. Also, 'foods' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide' instead of 'provides'. 'Dietary purpose' should be plural 'dietary purposes'.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× I still remember when I I still remember that my mother used to give me healthy snacks like fruits after coming back from the school, which was very nutritious and healthy for me.

✓ I still remember that my mother used to give me healthy snacks like fruits after I came back from school, which was very nutritious and healthy for me.

The phrase 'when I I still remember' is repetitive and incorrect. Also, 'coming back from the school' should be 'I came back from school' to maintain past tense and natural phrasing.

× Do you like to eat? I usually prefer holiday snacks like fruits and nuts because they provide us an energy and also, for example, eating almonds or apples for a day keeps a doctor away.

✓ I usually prefer healthy snacks like fruits and nuts because they provide us with energy, and for example, eating almonds or apples daily keeps the doctor away.

'Holiday snacks' seems incorrect in context; 'healthy snacks' fits better. 'Provide us an energy' is incorrect; it should be 'provide us with energy'. 'For a day' is better expressed as 'daily'. 'Keeps a doctor away' should be 'keeps the doctor away' as per the common phrase.