Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and making the sentence more concise and natural. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually have snacks around 5 or 6 PM, typically a cup of tea with some salt biscuits and a savory item, which helps to curb my hunger effectively.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and be more specific about 'air dried' snacks.

예시: I believe eating oily snacks is unhealthy; however, they help me stay energetic after a hectic day. Therefore, I prefer healthy options like fresh fruits or air-dried snacks.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve grammar by using past tense consistently. Also, clarify and connect ideas using linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks during my childhood because my generous parents pampered me. I especially loved oily foods, which are quite popular in our home.

제안: Reduce filler words and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples clearly.

예시: My snack preferences depend on my mood. Sometimes I enjoy spicy, savoury snacks; however, when I crave something sweet, I usually have gulab jamun.

× I usually eat snacks around 5:00 or 6:00 PM in the evening, which is essentially a cup of tea with some salt biscuits and a piece of, uh, a savory, which completely changes my hunger.

✓ I usually eat snacks around 5:00 or 6:00 PM in the evening, which is essentially a cup of tea with some salt biscuits and a piece of, uh, a savory, which completely satisfies my hunger.

The phrase 'changes my hunger' is incorrect because 'hunger' is a state or feeling that is not typically 'changed' by food. The correct verb here is 'satisfies' which means to fulfill or meet the feeling of hunger. Using 'satisfies' correctly conveys that the snack fulfills the hunger.

× But then I also would suggest to have healthy snacks like uh, fruits or uh, air dried.

✓ But then I would also suggest having healthy snacks like, uh, fruits or, uh, air-dried ones.

The verb 'suggest' is followed by a gerund (-ing form) rather than an infinitive ('to have'). Therefore, 'suggest to have' is incorrect; it should be 'suggest having'. Also, 'air dried' should be hyphenated as 'air-dried' when used as an adjective.

× Yes, I do have snacks very often in my childhood owing to the fact that my parents were very generous and, uh, they pampered me much.

✓ Yes, I had snacks very often in my childhood owing to the fact that my parents were very generous and, uh, they pampered me a lot.

The sentence refers to a past time ('childhood'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Do have' is present tense and incorrect here; it should be 'had'. Also, 'pampered me much' is unnatural; 'pampered me a lot' is the correct expression.

× Uh, and I love having, uh, oily foods as they are very famous in our home.

✓ Uh, and I love having, uh, oily food as it is very popular in our home.

'Oily foods' is plural, but the sentence refers to the general category of oily food, which is usually treated as uncountable singular. Also, 'famous' is not appropriate for food; 'popular' is the correct adjective to describe food that is well-liked.

× Uh, sometimes I would like to have umm, spicy snacks which is savoury.

✓ Uh, sometimes I would like to have, umm, spicy snacks which are savoury.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to maintain subject-verb agreement.