Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then explain briefly why you eat snacks on weekends. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure your sentences are complete and natural.

예시: I usually eat snacks only on weekends because I want to avoid health problems like weight gain during the week.

제안: Your answer is good and covers both unhealthy and healthy snacks with reasons. To improve, try to use more linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition' to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I think some snacks can be unhealthy, for example, fried snacks like fries can cause weight gain. In addition, healthy snacks such as fruits and nuts provide essential nutrients and keep energy levels up.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific details about what snacks you ate or who you asked. Also, correct grammar mistakes and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, when I was young, I often ate snacks every day because my parents gave me money. Mostly, I asked my grandfather to buy snacks for me.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference first, then give examples of both fried and healthy snacks. Use linking words like 'sometimes' and 'but mostly' properly to improve coherence.

예시: My choice of snacks depends on my mood. Sometimes, I like fried snacks such as French fries, burgers, and pizzas, but mostly I prefer healthy snacks like fruits because they provide important nutrients.

× Well, I usually eat snacks on my weekends, uh, because it's impact on our health, uh, such as cases, uh, gaining weight or obesity.

✓ Well, I usually eat snacks on my weekends, uh, because it impacts our health, uh, such as causing weight gain or obesity.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's impact' which should be 'it impacts' to correctly use the verb form. Also, 'such as cases, gaining weight' is unclear; 'such as causing weight gain' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I avoid, uh, to eat snacks, that's why.

✓ I avoid, uh, eating snacks, that's why.

After the verb 'avoid', the gerund form (verb + -ing) should be used, not the infinitive 'to eat'. Hence, 'avoid eating' is correct.

× Yes, I think eating some snacks can be unhealthy, specially fried snacks like fries, which can lead to weight gain and other health problems such as laziness and low energy.

✓ Yes, I think eating some snacks can be unhealthy, especially fried snacks like fries, which can lead to weight gain and other health problems such as laziness and low energy.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' when emphasizing a particular example.

× Yes, I remember from my young age I often eat snacks on my daily basis because on that time I get enough money from my parents.

✓ Yes, I remember from my young age I often ate snacks on a daily basis because at that time I got enough money from my parents.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'ate' and 'got' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'get'. Also, 'on my daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis' and 'on that time' should be 'at that time'.

× Mostly I ask my grandfather to.

✓ Mostly, I asked my grandfather to buy snacks for me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'buy snacks for me' completes the thought and changes 'ask' to past tense 'asked' to match the past context.

× Value should depend on my mood.

✓ My choice of snacks should depend on my mood.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks context. 'Value' is vague; specifying 'My choice of snacks' clarifies the meaning.

× Sometimes I like to fry snacks such as such as French fries and burgers, pizzas but mostly time I like to eat healthy snacks such as fruits and that provide nutrients to keep our health.

✓ Sometimes I like fried snacks such as French fries, burgers, and pizzas, but most of the time I like to eat healthy snacks such as fruits that provide nutrients to keep us healthy.

'Like to fry snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'like fried snacks'. Also, 'mostly time' should be 'most of the time'. The phrase 'and that provide nutrients' should be 'that provide nutrients'. 'Keep our health' is better expressed as 'keep us healthy'.