Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid repeating the word 'snack' multiple times and use linking words to make your response smoother. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: I usually eat snacks when I'm short on time; for instance, I might grab a banana or some dates to keep me going.

제안: Try to organize your ideas more clearly and avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh' and 'umm'. Use linking words to contrast ideas and finish with a clear opinion. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve clarity.

예시: Eating snacks can be healthy if you choose nutritious options like bananas or apple slices; however, consuming chocolates or sweets frequently is unhealthy. Therefore, I advise everyone to opt for healthy snacks.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear reasons using linking words. Practice speaking fluently and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my busy schedule and heavy responsibilities made me hungry between meals.

제안: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and contains some unclear phrases. Try to finish your sentences clearly and use linking words to explain why you like those snacks. Avoid repetition and unclear words.

예시: I prefer healthy snacks like a cup of yogurt mixed with fruit or a fruit salad because they provide me with energy between meals.

× I usually have a snack when I'm pressed for time, so I grab a quick snack, for example a banana or a bunch of dates.

✓ I usually have a snack when I'm pressed for time, so I grab a quick snack, for example, a banana or a bunch of dates.

A comma is needed after 'for example' to correctly separate the phrase from the rest of the sentence, improving clarity and readability.

× But if you are just taking umm, a if you are taking chocolate over sweets, so here it's not, it's not healthy at all.

✓ But if you are just taking, umm, chocolate instead of sweets, then it's not healthy at all.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect conjunctions ('a if', 'so here'). Replacing 'a if' with 'instead of' and 'so here' with 'then' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× So advice I advise everyone to take healthy snack just.

✓ So, I advise everyone to take healthy snacks.

The sentence lacks proper subject and article usage. Adding 'I' as the subject and pluralizing 'snack' to 'snacks' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Definitely, yes, I used to, uh, to eat, uh, snacks between meals.

✓ Definitely, yes, I used to eat snacks between meals.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed directly by the base verb without 'to'. Removing the extra 'to' corrects the past tense expression.

× Uh, you know that, uh, overwhelming in, uh, heavy load responsibilities and uh, is, and busy schedules make you hungry most of the time.

✓ You know that overwhelming heavy workload and busy schedules make you hungry most of the time.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary fillers. Removing fillers and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So yes, I prefer eating I, I used.

✓ So yes, I prefer eating snacks; I used to do that.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the thought and adding necessary words clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I usually eat healthy snacks so between the meals I prefer taking a cup of yogurt mixed with fruit or a fruit salad just to power my energy and post post my posts my.

✓ I usually eat healthy snacks, so between meals I prefer having a cup of yogurt mixed with fruit or a fruit salad just to boost my energy.

The phrase 'between the meals' should be 'between meals' for natural usage. 'Taking' is better replaced with 'having' in this context. The phrase 'post post my posts my' is unclear and corrected to 'boost my energy' to convey the intended meaning.