Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding repetition and using proper sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the evening while watching TV. For example, I enjoy snacking when watching movies or sports matches with my family.

제안: Focus on giving a clear opinion first, then explain your reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence clarity.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar or fat. However, I sometimes enjoy having snacks with tea as a way to relax and enjoy the taste.

제안: Use past tense consistently and organize your answer logically. Start with a clear statement, then add specific details with linking words to clarify your experience.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For instance, my parents gave me money to buy snacks at school during break time.

제안: Be specific about the snacks you like and use correct vocabulary. Avoid confusing phrases and explain your preferences clearly with linking words.

예시: I like snacks such as cookies and chips. Although chips are not very healthy, I enjoy them because they are light and tasty.

× And usually it's it's like in the evening time when I'm watching the TV and some watching the movie on the TV and sometimes I'm watching a match with my family.

✓ And usually it's like in the evening when I'm watching TV, sometimes watching a movie on TV, and sometimes watching a match with my family.

The phrase 'some watching the movie' is incorrect; 'some' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'the TV' is better as 'TV' without 'the' in this context. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity and correct use of present participle forms.

× And usually it's it's like in the evening time when I'm watching the TV and some watching the movie on the TV and sometimes I'm watching a match with my family.

✓ And usually it's like in the evening when I'm watching TV, sometimes watching a movie on TV, and sometimes watching a match with my family.

In English, 'TV' is generally used without the definite article 'the' when referring to watching television as an activity. Using 'the TV' is less common and can sound unnatural in this context.

× I think it is not healthy to eat the snack, but it will just for a time pass and sometimes I mean eating a snack with that tea, so it is eating just a good taste.

✓ I think it is not healthy to eat snacks, but it is just for passing time, and sometimes I mean eating a snack with tea, so it just tastes good.

The phrase 'eat the snack' should be 'eat snacks' to indicate the general activity. 'For a time pass' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'for passing time' or 'to pass time'. Also, 'that tea' should be simply 'tea' without 'that'. The sentence needed correction for quantifiers and idiomatic expressions.

× Of course, yes I'm often eating the snack, but now I was younger so that time my parents would give me some money.

✓ Of course, yes, I often ate snacks when I was younger because at that time my parents would give me some money.

The original sentence mixes present continuous 'I'm often eating' with past context. The correct tense is simple past 'I often ate' to match 'when I was younger'. Also, 'now I was younger' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was younger'.

× Of course, yes I'm often eating the snack, but now I was younger so that time my parents would give me some money.

✓ Of course, yes, I often ate snacks when I was younger because at that time my parents would give me some money.

Using 'the snack' is incorrect here; it should be 'snacks' to refer to snacks in general. The definite article 'the' is not appropriate when speaking generally.

× So that time I'm maybe so mostly in the school during my break time.

✓ So at that time, I was mostly at school during my break time.

'I'm maybe so mostly in the school' is incorrect. The pronoun 'I'm' (I am) does not fit past context; it should be 'I was'. Also, 'in the school' is better as 'at school' when referring to being present at the location generally.

× I do like a snack, snacks like a cookery and like chips.

✓ I do like snacks, like cookies and chips.

'A snack, snacks like a cookery' is incorrect. 'Cookery' is not a snack; likely the intended word is 'cookies'. Also, 'a snack, snacks' is inconsistent; it should be plural 'snacks' to refer generally.

× So chips is a very not. It's really not a bad health, not a healthy, but it is a very light food.

✓ So chips are not very healthy. They are really not bad for health, but they are not healthy either; however, they are a very light food.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect adjective forms. 'Chips is a very not' is incorrect; 'chips' is plural and needs plural verb 'are'. 'Not a bad health' should be 'not bad for health'. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity and correct adjective use.