Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid leaving thoughts unfinished. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "These days, I don't usually eat snacks as I used to because I try to maintain a balanced diet. Therefore, when I get hungry, I prefer to eat fruits or nuts instead."

예시: These days, I don't usually eat snacks as I used to because I try to maintain a balanced diet. Therefore, when I get hungry, I prefer to eat fruits or nuts instead.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more precise linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy like "healthy balanced diet" twice. Try to use linking words such as "however" or "on the other hand" to contrast ideas.

예시: It depends on the type of snacks you eat. Junk food is not healthy; however, fruits, dry nuts, and other nutritious snacks can help maintain a balanced diet.

제안: Your answer is good but can be more concise and avoid repeating "when I was young" twice. Use linking words like "but" effectively to show contrast. Also, try to add a little more detail to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, I used to eat snacks very often when I was young. I was crazy about gummies and chocolates, but now I realize the importance of a balanced diet, so I try to avoid such snacks.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using linking words like "however" to connect contrasting ideas and by varying vocabulary slightly. Also, try to avoid repeating "healthy and balanced diet" too often.

예시: I don't usually eat snacks between meals because I don't get hungry easily; however, when I do, I prefer dry nuts or fruits to keep my diet nutritious.

× So for instance, when I get hungry, I try to satisfy my hunger with.

✓ So for instance, when I get hungry, I try to satisfy my hunger.

The sentence ends abruptly with a preposition 'with' without an object, making it incomplete and structurally incorrect. Removing 'with' completes the sentence properly.

× So junk foods can not be a healthy option but instead you can have some fruits or dry nuts and any healthy dishes as a snack to keep healthy balanced diet.

✓ So junk foods cannot be a healthy option, but instead you can have some fruits, dry nuts, or any healthy dishes as a snack to maintain a healthy balanced diet.

The phrase 'to keep healthy balanced diet' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to maintain a healthy balanced diet'. Also, 'can not' is better written as 'cannot'. Commas are added for clarity.