Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「I try to avoid to high calorie snack」は「I try to avoid high-calorie snacks」とするのが自然です。また、文が少し冗長なので、簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

예시: I usually don't eat snacks because they are unhealthy. I try to avoid high-calorie foods and prefer healthier options.

제안: 文法ミスが多く、意味が少し分かりにくいです。例えば、「I don't think I eating a snack」は「I don't think eating snacks is healthy」と直す必要があります。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they contain a lot of sugar and oil. Therefore, people should avoid eating snacks too often.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。話の流れも途切れているため、もっと明確に答え、理由や感想を付け加える練習をしましょう。

예시: When I was young, I often ate snacks. Looking back, I think it was a good way for children to enjoy their free time.

제안: 話し言葉の「あー」や「えー」が多く、文が途切れがちです。もっと流暢に話す練習をし、限定版の話も明確に伝えられるようにしましょう。

예시: I really like crisps because they are crunchy and go well with beer. Whenever there is a limited edition flavor, I always try it because I enjoy trying new tastes.

× Actually I don't really eat snack because it's really unhealthy food.

✓ Actually I don't really eat snacks because they're really unhealthy foods.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to snacks in general. Also, 'food' should be plural 'foods' to match the plural subject or rephrased as 'unhealthy food' without 'really'.

× I try to avoid to high calorie snack or food.

✓ I try to avoid high-calorie snacks or food.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect after 'avoid'. The correct structure is 'avoid' + noun without 'to'. Also, 'high calorie' should be hyphenated as 'high-calorie' and 'snack' should be plural 'snacks'.

× I prefer to eat a healthier food.

✓ I prefer to eat healthier food.

'Food' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a' should be removed. 'Healthier' is used correctly as a comparative adjective.

× I don't think I eating a snack is healthy because it contain a lot of sugar and oil in it.

✓ I don't think eating a snack is healthy because it contains a lot of sugar and oil in it.

After 'think', the verb should be in the gerund form 'eating' without 'I'. Also, 'contain' should be 'contains' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× So I think people should avoid the snack often to eat.

✓ So I think people should avoid eating snacks often.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to refer generally. The phrase 'avoid the snack often to eat' is awkward; 'avoid eating snacks often' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× When I was young, I often eat snacks, my snacks, snacks time.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks during snack time.

Since the time is in the past ('When I was young'), the verb should be in past tense 'ate'. The phrase 'my snacks, snacks time' is unclear and corrected to 'during snack time'.

× I think it's a good for children to enjoy that time in hindsight, but.

✓ I think it's good for children to enjoy that time in hindsight.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'good'. The sentence fragment ending with 'but' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× Uh, I actually love uh, crisps.

✓ Uh, I actually love crisps.

The filler 'uh' is repeated unnecessarily; removing the second 'uh' improves sentence clarity.

× It's crunchy and good with beer.

✓ They're crunchy and good with beer.

'Crisps' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they're' instead of 'it's'.

× So I, when I, uh, limited edition, I always try give it a try because the limited edition.

✓ So, when there is a limited edition, I always try to give it a try because it's a limited edition.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'there is' and 'it's a' clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.