Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议用更自然的表达方式直接回答问题，并避免重复和语法错误。

예시: I rarely eat snacks nowadays because they usually contain too much sugar and fat, which isn't good for my health.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不流畅。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯。

예시: I believe eating snacks is unhealthy because they contain a lot of sugar, fat, and sometimes oil, which can harm my body.

제안: 回答语法错误较多，表达不完整且重复。建议用完整句子回答，并具体说明喜欢吃什么零食和原因。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because most children like sweets, and I was no exception.

제안: 回答较为完整，但语法和表达有小错误。建议注意主谓一致和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I like both chocolate and chips. Chocolate is sweet and helps me relieve stress, while chips are crunchy and also help me relax.

× Actually now I really eat snacks because it contains too much sugar and fat which is not healthy for my body.

✓ Actually now I don't really eat snacks because they contain too much sugar and fat which is not healthy for my body.

这里学生想表达现在不常吃零食，原句中用现在时态表达习惯动作，但语义上应是否定，且snacks是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式contain。

× Also they some some some of this made of oil which is also unhealthy.

✓ Also, some of them are made of oil which is also unhealthy.

原句中'they some some some of this'结构混乱，且this指代不明确。应使用复数代词them指代零食，且动词用被动语态are made。

× Yeah, when I was young, I often eat snacks because, you know, almost all of the children are king on the sweet thing.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, I often ate snacks because, you know, almost all of the children liked sweet things.

描述过去习惯动作时，动词应使用过去时态。原句中eat应改为ate，are king应改为liked，且sweet thing应为复数sweet things。

× So do I. So did I, and I often told my my.

✓ So do I. So did I, and I often told my parents.

原句末尾'told my my'结构不完整，缺少宾语。应补充完整宾语，如parents。

× Well both chocolate and chips are my favorite. Chocolate is very sweet so it could relieve my stress to some extent and the chips is very crunchy also have the function of relieving stress.

✓ Well, both chocolate and chips are my favorites. Chocolate is very sweet so it can relieve my stress to some extent and the chips are very crunchy and also have the function of relieving stress.

favorite应为复数favorites，因为指两个不同的零食。chips是复数，谓语动词应用are和have。could改为can更符合习惯表达。