Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: I usually eat snacks several times a day, regardless of whether I'm hungry or not. For example, I often enjoy chocolate in the afternoon because it gives me energy and makes me happy.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and hesitations. Try to give a clear opinion first, then explain your reasons with linking words to improve fluency and clarity.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because consuming too many can harm your body. For instance, excessive snacking may lead to weight gain and other health problems.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use past tense correctly and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. In fact, snacks were a source of happiness for me because I loved their sweet taste and enjoyed sharing them with my friends.

제안: Avoid filler words and try to organize your answer clearly. Start with a topic sentence, then add specific examples and reasons using linking words.

예시: I like to eat both sweet and salty snacks, such as chocolate and chips. This variety makes snacking enjoyable and satisfying for me.

× I eat snacks every day because I love eating snacks I can't imagine my life without.

✓ I eat snacks every day because I love eating snacks that I can't imagine my life without.

The original sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause properly. Adding 'that' clarifies the sentence structure and improves readability.

× It doesn't matter what time is it or what part of the day I can eat even though I'm hungry or not.

✓ It doesn't matter what time it is or what part of the day; I can eat even if I'm hungry or not.

The original sentence has incorrect word order in the question clause 'what time is it'. In indirect questions, the subject should come before the verb ('what time it is'). Also, 'even though I'm hungry or not' is better expressed as 'even if I'm hungry or not' for clarity.

× My favorite snack is chocolate and I enjoy eating it.

✓ My favorite snack is chocolate, and I enjoy eating it.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate two independent clauses. The sentence is otherwise correct in singular/plural usage.

× I don't think umm it snacks is not healthy because when you eat a lot of them it is not good for your body and it can destroy your health in general.

✓ I don't think snacks are healthy because when you eat a lot of them, it is not good for your body and can harm your health in general.

The phrase 'it snacks is not healthy' is incorrect. 'Snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, double negation 'I don't think... is not healthy' is confusing; it is clearer to say 'I don't think snacks are healthy'. Added commas improve readability.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young and in my childhood, snacks was my happiness because I love very much.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, and in my childhood, snacks were my happiness because I loved them very much.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'Snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. 'I love very much' is incomplete; it should be 'I loved them very much' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× I like to eat, uh, chocolate. Also I like, uh, chips. It does not matter it's a sweet or salt, umm, because it makes me happy to eat.

✓ I like to eat, uh, chocolate. Also, I like, uh, chips. It does not matter if it's sweet or salty, umm, because it makes me happy to eat.

The phrase 'it's a sweet or salt' is incorrect. It should be 'if it's sweet or salty' to correctly express the condition. 'Salty' is the correct adjective form, not 'salt'. Added commas improve sentence flow.