Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如时态混用和重复词汇。建议使用正确的时态，避免重复，并且使句子更简洁自然。

예시: I usually eat snacks almost every day because I am fond of sweet treats like candies and chocolate. Eating them makes me feel happier, especially when I am relaxing.

제안: 回答不完整且表达不流畅，缺少连贯的句子结构。建议完整表达观点，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Not really. Eating snacks like candies and chocolate, which are very sweet, can lead to health problems such as diabetes. Therefore, I think eating too many snacks is unhealthy.

제안: 回答中有拼写错误（snakes应为snacks），时态使用不当，且句子结构不够清晰。建议注意拼写，使用正确时态，并简化句子结构。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. Whenever I got high scores in primary school, my parents rewarded me with candies and chocolate, which made me feel proud.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“wheat trees”应为“wafers”，句子结构混乱。建议使用准确词汇，简洁表达，并注意语法。

예시: As I mentioned, I really like sweet snacks like chocolate and wafers. Whenever I feel stressed or bored with my busy work, I usually eat these snacks to feel better.

× Well to be honest I ate snacks nearly every day because I just fond of eating many sweet snacks especially the the candle candies and chocolate etcetera.

✓ Well to be honest I ate snacks nearly every day because I was just fond of eating many sweet snacks especially the candle candies and chocolate etcetera.

这里的主句是过去时态，描述过去的习惯，因此“just fond”应改为过去时态“was just fond”，表示过去的状态。

× This always made me feel more happier when I just eating in the.

✓ This always made me feel happier when I was just eating.

“more happier”是错误的比较级用法，happier本身是比较级，不需要加more；另外，句子不完整，补充完整并改为过去进行时“was just eating”。

× This always made me feel more happier when I just eating in the.

✓ This always made me feel happier when I was just eating.

“when I just eating”缺少助动词，应改为“when I was just eating”，表示过去进行时。

× Not really you know, when someone just eating snacks such as candies and chocolate that is super, super sweet and it will lead them to get more illness such as diabetes, right?

✓ Not really you know, when someone is just eating snacks such as candies and chocolate that are super, super sweet and it will lead them to get more illnesses such as diabetes, right?

“when someone just eating”缺少助动词，应为“when someone is just eating”；“that is super”指代复数，应改为“that are super”；“more illness”应为复数“more illnesses”。

× Not really you know, when someone just eating snacks such as candies and chocolate that is super, super sweet and it will lead them to get more illness such as diabetes, right?

✓ Not really you know, when someone is just eating snacks such as candies and chocolate that are super, super sweet and it will lead them to get more illnesses such as diabetes, right?

“illness”应使用复数形式“illnesses”，因为指多种疾病。

× Yeah, I always eat snakes when I'm a child.

✓ Yeah, I always ate snacks when I was a child.

描述过去的习惯，应使用过去时态“ate”和“was”；另外，“snakes”应为“snacks”。

× Yeah, I always eat snakes when I'm a child.

✓ Yeah, I always ate snacks when I was a child.

“I'm a child”应为过去时态“I was a child”，表示过去的身份。

× Yeah, I always eat snakes when I'm a child.

✓ Yeah, I always ate snacks when I was a child.

“snakes”拼写错误，应为“snacks”。

× You know, every time when I just get high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded with rewarded me with some snakes such as candies and chocolate, which has made me feel a sense of achievement.

✓ You know, every time when I got high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded me with some snacks such as candies and chocolate, which made me feel a sense of achievement.

“rewarded with rewarded me with”重复，应删去一个“rewarded”；“get”应为过去时“got”；“snakes”应为“snacks”；“has made”改为过去时“made”，与前文时态一致。

× You know, every time when I just get high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded with rewarded me with some snakes such as candies and chocolate, which has made me feel a sense of achievement.

✓ You know, every time when I got high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded me with some snacks such as candies and chocolate, which made me feel a sense of achievement.

“snakes”拼写错误，应为“snacks”。

× You know, every time when I just get high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded with rewarded me with some snakes such as candies and chocolate, which has made me feel a sense of achievement.

✓ You know, every time when I got high scores in primary school, my parents always rewarded me with some snacks such as candies and chocolate, which made me feel a sense of achievement.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态。

× Well just like I said some snacks such as wheat trees like chocolate or just adding other sweet things I just like very much.

✓ Well just like I said some snacks such as wheat treats like chocolate or just adding other sweet things I just like very much.

“wheat trees”拼写错误，应为“wheat treats”。

× Well just like I said some snacks such as wheat trees like chocolate or just adding other sweet things I just like very much.

✓ Well, just like I said, I really like some snacks such as wheat treats like chocolate or other sweet things.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，调整句子结构使其通顺。

× And every time when I just feel stressed and so bored with our with my busy work I will eat.

✓ And every time when I feel stressed and bored with my busy work, I eat snacks.

“just feel”中“just”多余；“so bored with our with my busy work”表达混乱，改为“bored with my busy work”；“I will eat”改为一般现在时“I eat”，表示习惯。