Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "really matches the movie night" and "somehow I think it makes the movie more impressive in a way." Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat snacks while watching a movie because popcorn complements the experience and makes it more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "sugar and oil always snack" and "fruit nuts are really good snack for daily." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and link your ideas logically.

예시: It depends on the type of snack. I try to avoid sugary and fried snacks, but I think fruits and nuts are healthy options for daily snacking.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions, such as "a little bit gift" and "when we do there's something great." Try to use past tense consistently and clarify your ideas with linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I loved snacks as a child because my teacher would sometimes give us small treats as rewards when we danced well or followed her instructions.

제안: Your answer repeats previous information and contains grammatical errors, such as "it serve" and "popcorns." Try to avoid repetition, use correct grammar, and provide more specific reasons or comparisons to enrich your answer.

예시: My favorite snack is popcorn because it’s not too sweet, which suits my dislike for sugary foods. It’s the perfect companion for watching movies.

× I'm trying to avoid the sugar and oil always snack and the fried snack too.

✓ I'm trying to avoid snacks that always have sugar and oil, and fried snacks too.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'the sugar and oil always snack' which is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies that the student is avoiding snacks that always contain sugar and oil. The quantifier 'always' should modify the verb phrase, not be placed awkwardly between nouns.

× But I think fruit nuts are really good snack for daily.

✓ But I think fruit nuts are really good snacks for daily consumption.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to agree with 'fruit nuts' which is plural. Also, 'for daily' is incomplete; adding 'consumption' makes the phrase clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I really love snacks when I was a kid because sometimes our teacher will give us snacks as a little bit gift when we dance and when we do there's something great or just follow her instruction.

✓ Yes, I really loved snacks when I was a kid because sometimes our teacher would give us snacks as a little gift when we danced or when we did something great or just followed her instructions.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with past time 'when I was a kid'. It should be past tense 'loved'. Also, 'will give' should be 'would give' to match past habitual action. 'Dance' should be past tense 'danced', and 'do there's something great' is unclear and corrected to 'did something great'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.

× Like I said before it serve as perfect complement one when there's a movie and popcorn just not so sweet for me because I don't have a sweet tooth.

✓ Like I said before, it serves as the perfect complement when there's a movie, and popcorn is just not so sweet for me because I don't have a sweet tooth.

The verb 'serve' should be 'serves' to agree with singular subject 'it' (popcorn). 'Complement one' is incorrect; 'the perfect complement' is correct. Added commas for clarity. 'Popcorn just not so sweet' needs 'is' to be grammatical.

× I usually hate sugary snacks I but I do love popcorns.

✓ I usually hate sugary snacks, but I do love popcorn.

'Popcorns' is incorrect because 'popcorn' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, the sentence had an extra 'I' which was removed for clarity.