Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'sometime' nên là 'sometimes'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và có liên kết hợp lý.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, between 4 and 5 PM, after finishing my last class at university. This is my free time when I feel like having a light bite.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu trả lời cần mạch lạc, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'energies and power'. Hơn nữa, nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

예시: Although eating snacks is not always healthy, it provides me with extra energy in the afternoon, which helps me stay active during outdoor activities in the evening.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể thêm một số liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể mở rộng thêm một chút về cảm xúc hoặc lý do để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

예시: Yes, absolutely. When I was a little girl, I often asked my dad to buy snacks for me in the afternoon. I really enjoyed those moments because I could spend time with my dad and sister while eating my favorite snacks, such as cakes or fruit.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến sự nhất quán về số nhiều/số ít (provides -> provide). Câu trả lời nên hoàn chỉnh hơn, tránh kết thúc đột ngột như 'supports my overall'. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và đầy đủ hơn.

예시: One of my favorite snacks is fresh fruit, such as bananas and apples, because they are not only nutritious but also provide a quick boost of energy. I prefer fresh fruits as a healthy alternative to processed snacks since they help me stay refreshed and support my overall health.

× I sometime enjoy snacks when I have free time or during afternoon break properly during 4:00 PM to 5:00 PM after I complete the final class at university.

✓ I sometimes enjoy snacks when I have free time or during the afternoon break, usually from 4:00 PM to 5:00 PM after I complete the final class at university.

The adverb 'sometime' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'afternoon break' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific break. The phrase 'properly during' is awkward; 'usually from' is more natural. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Although it might not be healthy for my physical well-being, it helps me supply additional energies and power in the afternoon before I participate in several outdoor activities in the evening.

✓ Although it might not be healthy for my physical well-being, it helps me supply additional energy and power in the afternoon before I participate in several outdoor activities in the evening.

The word 'energies' is incorrect because 'energy' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Using 'energy' in singular form is grammatically correct and natural in this context.

× Oh, one of my favorite snacks is fresh fruit such as bananas and apples because they are not only nutritious but also provides a quick boost of energy.

✓ Oh, one of my favorite snacks is fresh fruit such as bananas and apples because they are not only nutritious but also provide a quick boost of energy.

The verb 'provides' does not agree with the plural subject 'they' (referring to bananas and apples). The correct verb form is 'provide' to match the plural subject.

× I enjoy eating fresh fruits as a healthy alternative to processed snacks because it helps me stay fresh and supports my overall.

✓ I enjoy eating fresh fruits as a healthy alternative to processed snacks because they help me stay fresh and support my overall health.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear and does not agree with the plural subject 'fresh fruits'. It should be 'they' to refer to 'fresh fruits'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'my overall.' which is incomplete; adding 'health' completes the thought and improves clarity.