Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, say "I usually eat snacks once a day now, usually around 10 AM between breakfast and lunch. Before, I used to eat snacks twice a day."

예시: I usually eat snacks once a day now, typically around 10 AM between breakfast and lunch. Before, I used to eat snacks twice a day, once in the morning and once in the afternoon.

제안: Provide a clear opinion first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary. For example, "I think eating snacks can be healthy because it helps prevent low blood sugar. However, I have reduced my snack intake recently due to sugar spikes."

예시: I think eating snacks can be healthy because it helps prevent low blood sugar. However, I have reduced my snack intake recently because my blood sugar levels spiked.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Add linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I often ate snacks before meals when I was young because I preferred them over proper meals, so my mother would scold me."

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks before meals when I was young because I preferred them over proper meals, so my mother would scold me.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to compare past and present preferences. Use precise vocabulary. For example, "I used to enjoy sweet snacks like soda with biscuits or cocoa with bread. However, now I prefer healthier options such as fruits."

예시: I used to enjoy sweet snacks like soda with biscuits or cocoa with bread. However, now I prefer healthier options such as fruits.

× No, I think it's I cut it off too once a day before I do it twice a day.

✓ No, I think I cut it down to once a day; before, I used to do it twice a day.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's' and 'do it twice a day' which is awkward and ungrammatical. The phrase 'cut it off too once a day' is unclear and should be 'cut it down to once a day' to express reduction. Also, 'before I do it twice a day' should be 'before, I used to do it twice a day' to indicate past habit.

× Like in between meals I would eat snacks between lunch time and in the morning at around 10 P 10 AM and.

✓ Like between meals, I would eat snacks between lunchtime and in the morning at around 10 AM.

The phrase 'in between meals' is better as 'between meals' for correct preposition use. 'Lunch time' should be one word 'lunchtime'. The phrase '10 P 10 AM and' is unclear and should be corrected to '10 AM'.

× My body was get used of eating snacks at least twice a day but then since my sugar spiked.

✓ My body was used to eating snacks at least twice a day, but then my sugar spiked.

The phrase 'was get used of' is incorrect. The correct form is 'was used to' followed by a gerund. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should be connected properly with a comma and conjunction.

× I think I eat snacks before I eat my meal time proper.

✓ I think I ate snacks before I ate my proper mealtime.

The question is about past habits, so the verbs should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of 'eat'. Also, 'meal time proper' is awkward and should be 'proper mealtime'.

× Like I would prefer to eat snacks rather than to eat the meals and my mother would scold me.

✓ I would prefer to eat snacks rather than meals, and my mother would scold me.

The phrase 'rather than to eat the meals' is awkward; 'rather than meals' is sufficient. Also, 'the meals' is unnecessary here.

× Before I like to eat snacks that are so sweet like soda with biscuits or cocoa, cocoa with with bread.

✓ Before, I liked to eat snacks that were very sweet, like soda with biscuits or cocoa with bread.

The tense should be past 'liked' to match the past context. 'So sweet' is better as 'very sweet' for formal correctness. Also, 'cocoa, cocoa with with bread' has a repeated word and should be corrected to 'cocoa with bread'.

× But then now I realize that I can eat snacks like fruits.

✓ But now I realize that I can eat snacks like fruits.

The phrase 'But then now' is redundant; 'But now' is sufficient. The rest of the sentence is correct.