Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use correct plural forms and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I usually eat snacks twice a week because my parents don't allow me to eat too many, as they can be unhealthy." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually eat snacks twice a week because my parents don't allow me to have too many, as they can be unhealthy. Therefore, I try to limit my snack intake to stay healthy.

제안: Your answer is on the right track but needs clearer structure and correction of errors. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" properly. Also, correct the word "surgery" to "sugary snacks" or similar. Try: "Eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely because some snacks, like fruits or nuts, provide essential nutrients and energy between meals."

예시: Eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely because fruits and nuts provide essential nutrients and energy between meals, unlike sugary snacks which are less beneficial.

제안: Use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Instead of "In my youngster age," say "When I was young." Avoid repeating the same idea twice. For example: "When I was young, I didn't eat many snacks because my parents thought they were unhealthy."

예시: When I was young, I didn't eat many snacks because my parents believed they were unhealthy and limited my intake.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Specify the snacks clearly and use correct plural forms. For example: "I enjoy eating a variety of snacks, but my favorites are fruits like apples and bananas because they are delicious and healthy."

예시: I enjoy eating a variety of snacks, but my favorites are fruits such as apples and bananas, which are both delicious and healthy.

× I usually consume snack twice a week because my parents don't allow me to eat too much snack because sometimes they are not healthy for our lives so that's why I consume less snacks.

✓ I usually consume snacks twice a week because my parents don't allow me to eat too many snacks since sometimes they are not healthy for our lives, so that's why I consume fewer snacks.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' when referring to more than one item. Also, 'too much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'snacks' are countable, so 'too many' is correct. 'Less' should be 'fewer' when referring to countable nouns like 'snacks'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Eating snack can be healthy if chosen wisely.

✓ Eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to snacks in general, which is a countable noun. Using the plural form is appropriate when speaking about the category or multiple items.

× For example, opting for fruit or nuts instead of surgery or snacks provide essential nutrients and energy between meals.

✓ For example, opting for fruit or nuts instead of sugary snacks provides essential nutrients and energy between meals.

The original sentence has a confusing phrase 'surgery or snacks' which seems incorrect. It likely intended 'sugary snacks'. Also, the subject 'opting' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' not 'provide'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my youngster age, I did not consume too much snack as I already mentioned that my parents did not allow me to consume too much snack because sometimes it unhealthy for our life.

✓ In my younger age, I did not consume too many snacks as I already mentioned that my parents did not allow me to consume too many snacks because sometimes they are unhealthy for our lives.

'Youngster age' is incorrect; 'younger age' or 'childhood' is better. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple items. 'Too much' should be 'too many' for countable nouns. 'It unhealthy' should be 'they are unhealthy' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'Our life' should be 'our lives' to match plural form.

× I enjoy eating a variety of snack but my favorite would have to be food, especially apple banana and they are not only delicious but also healthy.

✓ I enjoy eating a variety of snacks but my favorites would have to be fruits, especially apples and bananas, and they are not only delicious but also healthy.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' after 'a variety of'. 'Favorite' should be plural 'favorites' because multiple items are mentioned. 'Food' is too general; 'fruits' is more specific. 'Apple banana' should be 'apples and bananas' to correctly list the fruits. These changes improve grammatical correctness and clarity.