Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и нечетких выражений, таких как "they held mistake come and relax". Рекомендуется использовать более простые и понятные фразы, избегать излишней длины и повторов, а также улучшить структуру предложения для ясности.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon while watching movies because they are tasty and help me relax. However, I try to eat them in moderation because eating too many snacks can be unhealthy.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно добавить связующие слова для плавности и более конкретные детали, например, почему фрукты и овощи полезны. Также стоит избегать неопределенных выражений, таких как "may be good".

예시: I think eating snacks is not very healthy because they often contain additives and a lot of sugar. Therefore, I prefer healthy snacks like fruits and vegetables, which provide vitamins and fiber that are beneficial for our health.

제안: В ответе есть грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "I frequently add snacks" и "various of snacks". Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более точные формулировки, а также добавить связующие слова для логичности.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I enjoyed them. I used to buy different kinds of snacks every day. However, as I grew older, I realized that they could be harmful to my health, so now I prefer healthy options like fruits and vegetables.

제안: Ответ содержит много непонятных и неправильных слов, например, "arietti", "scanned", "admire cabbage". Рекомендуется использовать простые и понятные слова, четко описывать предпочтения и избегать бессвязных фраз.

예시: I like to eat chips more than other snacks because they are very tasty. There are many different flavors of chips, and I especially enjoy the slightly salty ones.

× they held mistake come and relax

✓ they help me come and relax

The phrase 'held mistake come and relax' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that snacks help the speaker to come and relax. The verb 'held' is incorrect here; the correct past participle form is 'help' in present tense to match the context. The phrase 'mistake come' is nonsensical and should be 'help me come'. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× eating too much snacks may possibly be harmful for our self

✓ eating too many snacks may possibly be harmful for ourselves

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'many' is used with countable nouns like 'snacks'. Also, 'our self' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun for 'our' is 'ourselves'. The correction uses 'many' and 'ourselves' appropriately.

× So I try to eat some less

✓ So I try to eat less

The phrase 'some less' is incorrect. 'Less' is used without 'some' when referring to a smaller amount of something uncountable or plural in a general sense. The correction removes 'some' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× they may contain additives or too much sugar

✓ snacks may contain additives or too much sugar

The pronoun 'they' is vague here. It is clearer to specify 'snacks' to avoid ambiguity. This improves clarity and correctness.

× There were various of snacks I bought every day

✓ There were various snacks I bought every day

The phrase 'various of snacks' is incorrect. 'Various' is used directly before a plural noun without 'of'. The correction removes 'of' to fix the error.

× by the time I grew up, I recognize that they may possibly be harmful for our health

✓ by the time I grew up, I recognized that they might possibly be harmful for our health

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Grew up' is past tense, so 'recognize' should be in past tense 'recognized'. Also, 'may' is better changed to 'might' to match past tense modality.

× Instead, I would prefer healthy options like fruit or vegetables

✓ Instead, I would prefer healthy options like fruits or vegetables

'Fruit' can be uncountable or countable. Here, since 'vegetables' is plural, 'fruits' should be plural to match the parallel structure.

× Their arietti of chips

✓ Their variety of chips

The phrase 'arietti' is incorrect and likely a misspelling of 'variety'. The pronoun 'Their' is correct if referring to a brand or group. The correction replaces 'arietti' with 'variety'.

× It is widely known that they have different scanned and

✓ It is widely known that they have different flavors and

The sentence is incomplete and contains the word 'scanned' which is incorrect in this context. Likely intended word is 'flavors'. The correction completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Taste so I admire cabbage, most of them

✓ The taste is a little bitter, so I admire it, most of them

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Cabbage' is singular, so 'admire cabbage' is correct but 'most of them' is unclear. The correction clarifies the taste and admiration.

× It's tasted a little bitter so I enjoy

✓ It tastes a little bitter, so I enjoy it

'It's tasted' is incorrect; the correct present tense is 'It tastes'. Also, the sentence needs an object 'it' after 'enjoy'.