Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding sentence fragments and improving grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and be more specific about your snack preferences.

예시: I usually eat snacks around 4:00 PM in the evening, often with tea or coffee. I prefer spicy snacks over sweet ones because they satisfy my taste buds better.

제안: Improve coherence by using linking words and avoid repetition. Also, clarify your points with more specific examples and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

예시: I think the healthiness of snacks depends on the type we choose. For example, deep-fried or sugary snacks are unhealthy, but nuts and dark chocolate are healthier options. Therefore, it's important to select snacks wisely.

제안: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about the types of snacks your mom made.

예시: When I was young, my mom often made snacks for us. She usually prepared three to four different varieties at once to keep things interesting and ensure they were healthy.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy and sentence fluency. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about the snacks you enjoy and why.

예시: I enjoy a combination of sweet and savory snacks, but due to health reasons, I have stopped eating sugary foods. Therefore, I mostly choose savory snacks, although I occasionally have cookies.

× I'm a person who likes. Snacks a bit more than the regular food.

✓ I'm a person who likes snacks a bit more than regular food.

The original sentence has an unnecessary period after 'likes' which breaks the sentence structure. Removing the period connects the subject and object properly, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× I take it mostly during evening at 4:00 PM along with some tea or coffee.

✓ I take it mostly in the evening at 4:00 PM along with some tea or coffee.

The preposition 'during' is incorrect here; 'in the evening' is the correct phrase to indicate a time of day. 'During' is used with events or periods, not parts of the day.

× I prefer something that is spicy than this sweet ones.

✓ I prefer something that is spicier than these sweet ones.

The comparative form 'spicier' should be used instead of 'spicy' when comparing. Also, 'this sweet ones' is incorrect; 'these sweet ones' is correct because 'ones' is plural and requires 'these'.

× According to me, it depends on the snacks that we choose to eat.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the snacks that we choose to eat.

'According to me' is not a natural English expression. 'In my opinion' is the correct phrase to express personal views.

× If they're deep fried or sugary items, they're not healthy if we snack on nuts or dark chocolate.

✓ If they're deep-fried or sugary items, they're not healthy, but if we snack on nuts or dark chocolate, it's healthier.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks clarity. Adding 'but' and splitting the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× There are a variety of options where we can choose.

✓ There are a variety of options from which we can choose.

The phrase 'where we can choose' is incorrect; 'from which we can choose' correctly expresses the idea of selecting from options.

× The things that we want to eat.

✓ These are the things that we want to eat.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'These are' completes the sentence.

× When I think about snacks, I remember about the snacks that my mom used to make.

✓ When I think about snacks, I remember the snacks that my mom used to make.

The verb 'remember' does not require the preposition 'about' when followed by a direct object.

× For us at home she she used to cook like 3 to 4 varieties at a time so that we don't get bored of eating a single thing all the time and they're healthy also.

✓ For us at home, she used to cook about 3 to 4 varieties at a time so that we didn't get bored of eating a single thing all the time, and they were healthy also.

The repeated 'she' is a typo. 'Like' should be 'about' to indicate approximation. The tense should be past ('didn't get bored', 'were healthy') to match 'used to cook'. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× I generally takes savory items.

✓ I generally take savory items.

The subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb 'take' without 's'. 'Takes' is used with third person singular subjects.