Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, directly answering the question with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like "branch out in your brain is."

예시: I usually eat snacks during school hours because studying consumes a lot of energy. For example, I often have a granola bar or fruit between classes to keep my energy up.

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but has some awkward phrasing and incomplete sentences. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid fragmented sentences. Also, be more specific about why those snacks are healthy.

예시: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if you choose the right ones. For instance, I often eat apples and nuts because they provide essential nutrients and help me maintain energy without unhealthy fats or sugars.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and confusing phrases. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear words like "Saudi cookies up."

예시: When I was younger, I didn't eat many snacks because I didn't like common ones like chips or crackers. Instead, I preferred chocolate occasionally, which was my favorite treat.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: As I mentioned, I usually carry apples and nuts for snacks. However, after a long, hard day, I enjoy buying ice cream from a convenience store because it helps me relax and feel happy.

× I actually have snacks very often, especially when I go to school because during classes you are really branch out in your brain is.

✓ I actually have snacks very often, especially when I go to school because during classes your brain really branches out.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'you are really branch out in your brain is', which is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'your brain really branches out', using the third person singular verb 'branches' to agree with the singular subject 'brain'. This corrects the verb form and subject-verb agreement.

× Consuming a lot of calories so I usually have snacks during classes.

✓ It consumes a lot of calories, so I usually have snacks during classes.

The original sentence fragment 'Consuming a lot of calories' lacks a subject and verb agreement. Changing it to 'It consumes a lot of calories' provides a clear subject and verb, making the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× And for me I would sometimes grab apple and some nuts.

✓ And for me, I would sometimes grab an apple and some nuts.

The original sentence misses the article 'an' before 'apple', and the pronoun usage is correct but the article is necessary for countable singular nouns. Adding 'an' before 'apple' corrects the sentence.

× It's or it's really good options for you too.

✓ They're really good options for you too.

The original sentence uses 'It's or it's' incorrectly. The correct subject for plural 'options' is 'They are', contracted as 'They're'. This corrects the pronoun to agree with the plural noun.

× I'm just. Have some intake of calories but as the same time stay healthy.

✓ I just have some intake of calories but at the same time stay healthy.

The original sentence is fragmented and missing prepositions. Combining the fragments and correcting 'as the same time' to 'at the same time' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I'm when I'm a little bit younger, I don't really like snacks.

✓ When I was a little bit younger, I didn't really like snacks.

The original sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'I'm' and 'don't' when referring to past time. Changing to past tense 'was' and 'didn't' correctly reflects the past context.

× I am kind of weird kids when I was small.

✓ I was kind of a weird kid when I was small.

The original sentence incorrectly uses plural 'kids' with singular subject 'I'. Changing 'kids' to singular 'kid' and adjusting the verb to past tense 'was' corrects the pronoun and verb agreement.

× So am I am limited to eat chocolate?

✓ So I was limited to eating chocolate.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb form. Changing to 'I was limited to eating chocolate' corrects the sentence structure and verb usage.

× I'm like I said, I usually have a an apple and some nuts in my bag, but usually I really like to go to convenience store and buy a.

✓ Like I said, I usually have an apple and some nuts in my bag, but usually I really like to go to the convenience store and buy a...

The original sentence has redundant 'a an' and misses the article 'the' before 'convenience store'. Removing the extra article and adding 'the' corrects the article usage.

× Ice cream during us out. Big hard day but it's such a enjoyable moment for me.

✓ Ice cream during a hard day out. It's such an enjoyable moment for me.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect article usage ('a enjoyable' should be 'an enjoyable'). Reordering and correcting articles improves clarity and grammar.