Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答不够清晰，表达含糊且有语法错误，建议回答时注意句子结构，避免无意义的词汇，保持简洁明了。

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon and sometimes after dinner because it helps me relax and take a short break from my work.

제안: 回答中表达不清，语法和词汇使用错误较多，建议用简单句表达观点，并用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: I think eating snacks has both advantages and disadvantages. Although some snacks are unhealthy, they can help me relax and reduce stress.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议注意时态和单复数，避免重复表达，句子结构要完整。

예시: No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother didn't allow me to. As a result, my teeth are very healthy and clean.

제안: 回答不连贯且词汇错误较多，建议先明确表达喜欢的零食名称，再说明原因，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

예시: I like to eat spicy snacks called 'more usual' because they are not too oily and fit well into my diet.

× I often eat after the clouds and also after lunch or dinner It yeah, I think it can relax my mind and give me a break to all the things size I concert.

✓ I often eat snacks after the classes and also after lunch or dinner. Yeah, I think it can relax my mind and give me a break from all the things since I concentrate.

原句中“eat after the clouds”应为“eat after the classes”，clouds（云）与语境不符，且缺少名词“snacks”使句意完整。句中“give me a break to all the things size I concert”结构混乱，应改为“give me a break from all the things since I concentrate”，使表达更清晰。建议注意词汇选择和句子结构的完整性。

× Well, I think it's half the tooth two sides to hunt for meat be 'cause I think I I eat the snacks I eat is very unhelpful for my body health, but it also can relax my mind at that I mentioned before so. Aye.

✓ Well, I think it's like two sides of a coin because I think the snacks I eat are not very helpful for my health, but they can also relax my mind as I mentioned before.

原句中“half the tooth two sides to hunt for meat”表达混乱，应为“like two sides of a coin”表示两面性。代词使用不当，“I eat the snacks I eat is”应改为“the snacks I eat are”，主谓不一致。建议注意代词和固定表达的正确使用。

× Well no no no my mother is that didn't allow me to eat snakes when I young so my teeth teeth are very healthy and clean becauses I didn't eat any snacks when I'm young and it all sank to my mouth.

✓ Well no, my mother didn't allow me to eat snacks when I was young, so my teeth are very healthy and clean because I didn't eat any snacks when I was young and they didn't stay in my mouth.

原句中“is that didn't allow”时态和结构错误，应为“didn't allow”。“when I young”缺少过去时态be动词，应为“when I was young”。“teeth teeth”重复，应去掉一个。建议注意过去时态的正确使用和句子结构的完整。

× Well, I think I would like to eat our spicy snakes which called more usual becauses it can it can not to add too much coverage in my diary 10, it also can.

✓ Well, I think I would like to eat our spicy snacks which are called 'more usual' because they don't add too many calories to my diet, and they are also tasty.

原句中“our spicy snakes”应为“our spicy snacks”，“snakes”是蛇，与语境不符。短语“which called more usual”缺少被动语态，应为“which are called 'more usual'”。“not to add too much coverage in my diary 10”表达错误，应为“don't add too many calories to my diet”。建议注意词汇拼写和形容词、副词的正确使用。