Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误和重复。建议简化句子，避免冗余，并注意语法正确性。

예시: I usually don't eat snacks because I think they are bad for my health. Although I like snacks, I try to avoid them and only eat them very rarely.

제안: 回答中断断续续，表达不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达观点，并用连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: Whether eating snacks is healthy depends on the amount. For me, eating a small amount of snacks is healthy and does not cause harm.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且内容重复。建议用完整句子表达，避免语法错误，并具体说明原因。

예시: I hardly ever ate snacks when I was a kid. To be honest, I liked sweets such as chocolates and candies, but my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because they are harmful to my health.

제안: 回答表达了喜好，但有重复和语法错误。建议避免重复，使用连贯句子，并丰富细节。

예시: Chocolate is definitely my favorite snack because it tastes sweet, smooth, and creamy. However, I only eat it on special occasions like birthday parties, and I prefer to share it with my friends rather than eating alone.

× Although I like snacks are tried to avoid them and only eat them very rarely.

✓ Although I like snacks, I try to avoid them and only eat them very rarely.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'are' and lacks a conjunction to connect clauses properly. Adding a comma and 'I try' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× Well, this question. It is healthy or not decided by how much snacks you eat.

✓ Well, this question of whether it is healthy or not is decided by how many snacks you eat.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. Rephrasing it into a complete sentence with proper structure improves understanding.

× For me, if only. If I only eat a few snacks, that will be healthy and no harm.

✓ For me, if I only eat a few snacks, that will be healthy and cause no harm.

The phrase 'if only' is incomplete and incorrectly used. Also, 'no harm' needs a verb to be grammatically correct. The correction clarifies the meaning and fixes quantifier usage.

× To be honest, I liked it Stacks.

✓ To be honest, I liked snacks.

'Stacks' is a typo for 'snacks'. The past tense 'liked' is correct here, but the word needs correction.

× But my mom, she didn't allow me to eat too much chocolate or candies because it's harm to my house.

✓ But my mom didn't allow me to eat too much chocolate or candies because it's harmful to my health.

The pronoun 'she' is redundant after 'my mom'. Also, 'it's harm to my house' is incorrect; it should be 'harmful to my health' to convey the intended meaning.

× It's definitely my favorite snacks.

✓ They're definitely my favorite snacks.

'Snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' contracted as 'they're' instead of 'it's' which is singular.

× I like to eat it.

✓ I like to eat them.

Referring to 'snacks' or 'chocolates' which are plural, so the pronoun should be plural 'them' instead of singular 'it'.

× But I But I only eat chocolate in some special occasions like the birthday parties and I like to share chocolate with my friend, not alone.

✓ But I only eat chocolate on special occasions like birthday parties, and I like to share chocolate with my friends, not alone.

'In some special occasions' should be 'on special occasions'. Also, 'birthday parties' does not need 'the'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context.