Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法错误，表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且内容重复。建议简化句子，使用正确时态，并且逻辑清晰地表达原因。

예시: I usually don't eat snacks now because I spend most of my day at school and I can't bring snacks with me. When I get home in the evening, it's usually too late to eat anything.

제안: 回答内容较好，但有语法错误和表达不完整的问题。建议注意句子完整性，避免断句，使用更准确的词汇。

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many of them are too salty or sweet. Also, some snacks contain preservatives and additives that can be harmful if eaten often.

제안: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，句子不连贯，影响理解。建议练习完整句子表达，避免断句和无意义词汇，清晰表达观点。

예시: When I was a child in primary school, I often ate snacks because they tasted good. For example, I liked candies and chocolates. At that time, I didn't care much about my health, so I didn't feel guilty about eating snacks.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清楚的问题，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，正确使用形容词和比较级。

예시: My favorite snack is chocolate, especially dark chocolate because it tastes good and is not too sweet. I prefer it because the flavor is more balanced.

× Nowadays I don't already eat snacks.

✓ Nowadays I don't eat snacks anymore.

句中使用了“don't already eat”，'already'通常用于肯定句或疑问句中，否定句中应使用“anymore”表示不再做某事。此处应使用一般现在时态表达现在的习惯。

× Because I usually went home at evening and before that I'm in school so I can't really bring snacks to school so I can't eat snacks and after I went back home is too late to eat snacks.

✓ Because I usually go home in the evening and before that I'm at school, so I can't really bring snacks to school and can't eat snacks. After I go back home, it's too late to eat snacks.

句中“went”是过去时，但描述的是现在的习惯，应使用一般现在时“go”。“at evening”应为“in the evening”。“after I went back home is too late”结构不正确，应改为“After I go back home, it's too late”。

× I don't think eating snack is healthy for me because many of them are too salty or too sweet.

✓ I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because many of them are too salty or too sweet.

“snack”应为复数形式“snacks”，因为后文提到“many of them”，指多个零食。

× Additionally, some snacks contin ingredients that can be harmful to our body if consumed frequently.

✓ Additionally, some snacks contain ingredients that can be harmful to our body if consumed frequently.

“contin”是拼写错误，应为“contain”，表示“包含”。

× For example, many Chinese snacks have preservatives. Or addictive additives that may.

✓ For example, many Chinese snacks have preservatives or addictive additives that may be harmful.

句子断裂，“Or addictive additives that may.”不完整，应与前句合并并补充完整。

× When I was a kid in primary school I often it's next because they taste very good and related issues.

✓ When I was a kid in primary school, I often ate snacks because they tasted very good.

“I often it's next”结构错误，应为“I often ate snacks”。“related issues”无上下文且不完整，应删除。

× Hello sweet tethers.

✓ Hello sweet treats.

“tethers”拼写错误，应为“treats”，表示“美味的点心”。

× And in that time, I really don't. I don't really care about my health, so I don't feel guilty to eat snacks.

✓ And at that time, I really didn't care about my health, so I didn't feel guilty eating snacks.

描述过去的情况，应使用过去时态“didn't care”和“didn't feel”。“feel guilty to eat”应改为“feel guilty eating”。

× My favorite snack is chocolate, especially the black chocolate because it is very good and I'm not very fond of the snacks which are two sweet.

✓ My favorite snack is chocolate, especially dark chocolate because it is very good and I'm not very fond of snacks which are too sweet.

“the black chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”，且“snacks which are two sweet”中“two”应为“too”，且不需要定冠词“the”。

× So it's a black chocolates. It just made my test is is little is more moderate. 2.

✓ So it's dark chocolate. It just makes my taste a little more moderate.

句子结构混乱，拼写错误，“black chocolates”应为“dark chocolate”，“test”应为“taste”，“is is little is more moderate”应为“a little more moderate”。