Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors like missing articles and prepositions.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the evening, especially when I have a cup of tea while watching movies. This helps me relax and enjoy my leisure time more.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words to connect your points logically. Also, correct vocabulary mistakes like 'chosen by sleep' which seems incorrect. Be specific about why some snacks are healthy.

예시: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if you choose the right ones. For example, fruits and nuts are better options than oily or junk foods because they provide essential nutrients and help maintain good health.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors and incomplete sentences. Try to give a direct response with clear supporting details. Avoid repetition and irrelevant words like 'asphalt'.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child because I had a habit of eating something small every evening, usually fruits or biscuits.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and unclear words like 'in senchal' and 'St. foods'. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Provide a clear reason and avoid redundancy.

예시: I prefer eating fruits and nuts instead of junk food because they provide essential nutrients. I avoid junk food daily as it can be harmful to my health.

× I usually eat snacks in evening whenever I'm having a cup of tea while watching movies.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening whenever I'm having a cup of tea while watching movies.

The phrase 'in evening' is incorrect because 'evening' is a specific time of day and requires the definite article 'the' before it. The correct phrase is 'in the evening'.

× Oh yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if chosen by sleep.

✓ Oh yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely.

The phrase 'chosen by sleep' is incorrect and does not make sense in this context. It seems the intended meaning is 'chosen wisely' or 'chosen carefully'. Using the correct adverb clarifies the meaning.

× Can be a. More beneficial because it provides essential nutrients for your body and it is important to avoid excessive.

✓ It can be more beneficial because it provides essential nutrients for your body, and it is important to avoid excessive consumption.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. Starting with 'Can be a.' is incorrect. The sentence needs a subject 'It' and a complete predicate. Also, 'excessive' should be followed by a noun like 'consumption' to complete the meaning.

× Oh yes, I often used to eat eat snacks when I was a little child because I had a habit of eating one food daily in the evening and I opted. Snacks. Asphalt.

✓ Oh yes, I often used to eat snacks when I was a little child because I had a habit of eating one food daily in the evening and I opted for snacks as well.

The sentence contains repeated words 'eat eat' which is an error. Also, 'I opted. Snacks. Asphalt.' is fragmented and unclear. It should be corrected to 'I opted for snacks as well' to make sense. The past tense 'used to eat' is correct here.

× I like eating a fruit and nuts instead of junk food because they also provide in senchal nutrients to your body and I avoid eating junk foods and St. foods on the daily basis because it can be harmful for your health.

✓ I like eating fruits and nuts instead of junk food because they also provide essential nutrients to your body, and I avoid eating junk food and street foods on a daily basis because they can be harmful to your health.

The phrase 'a fruit and nuts' is incorrect; 'fruits and nuts' is appropriate when referring to these items generally. 'In senchal' is a misspelling of 'essential'. 'Junk foods and St. foods' should be 'junk food and street foods'. Also, 'on the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. The plural 'they' matches the plural subjects 'fruits and nuts' and 'junk food and street foods'.