Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngắt quãng, làm cho ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp lại từ không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I usually eat snacks like beans and fast foods almost every day. For example, I often grab a pack of French fries on my way home from school.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi phát âm và ngắt quãng, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh để giải thích lý do của mình.

예시: Actually, I don't think eating snacks like French fries or beans is healthy because they often have very high calories and low levels of minerals.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngắt quãng và thông tin không chính xác (ví dụ: tuổi 425). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi số liệu không hợp lý.

예시: Yes, when I was about 4 or 5 years old, I didn't have much money to buy snacks, but every afternoon I would ask my mom for some potato chips.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi ngắt quãng và sử dụng từ không chính xác (ví dụ: 'pokies'). Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh để diễn đạt ý của mình.

예시: I love eating snacks that are somewhat unhealthy, such as potato chips, French fries, cookies, and chocolate chips. I know they are unhealthy, but healthier alternatives don't taste as good.

× I eat beans and. Other kind of fats fast foods almost everyday.

✓ I eat beans and other kinds of fatty fast foods almost every day.

The phrase 'Other kind of fats fast foods' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types, and 'fats fast foods' is incorrect; it should be 'fatty fast foods' to describe the food properly. Also, 'everyday' as one word is an adjective, but here it should be two words 'every day' meaning each day.

× For example, I can. I can go grab a. Pack of French fries on the way from school to home.

✓ For example, I can go grab a pack of French fries on the way from school to home.

The sentence is fragmented with unnecessary periods breaking the sentence into incomplete parts. Combining them into one coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Actually, I don't think so because snacks like French fries or. Beam beams often have. Very hike. Calories and a low level of mine rolls or.

✓ Actually, I don't think so because snacks like French fries or beans often have very high calories and a low level of minerals.

'Beam beams' is a misspelling of 'beans'. 'Very hike' should be 'very high'. 'Mine rolls' should be 'minerals'. Also, the sentence fragments need to be combined properly for clarity.

× Yes, back then when I was like. 425 years old, I didn't have much money to buy snacks myself, but every afternoon I would go to town.

✓ Yes, back then when I was like 4 or 5 years old, I didn't have much money to buy snacks myself, but every afternoon I would go to town.

The phrase '425 years old' is a typo and should be '4 or 5 years old'. Also, the period after 'like' is incorrect and breaks the sentence unnaturally.

× My mom. Mom, I want some potato chips.

✓ I would say to my mom, 'Mom, I want some potato chips.'

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding a subject and quotation marks clarifies that the student is speaking to their mom.

× I love eating snacks that are somehow unhealthy, such as potato chips or French fries or even pokies and chocolate chips.

✓ I love eating snacks that are somewhat unhealthy, such as potato chips, French fries, or even cookies and chocolate chips.

'Somehow' is incorrect here; 'somewhat' is the correct adverb. 'Pokies' is likely a misspelling of 'cookies'. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× I know their unhealthy but healthier alternatives like. Not taste good.

✓ I know they're unhealthy, but healthier alternatives don't taste good.

'Their' should be the contraction 'they're' (they are). The sentence fragments need to be combined properly. 'Not taste good' is incorrect; it should be 'don't taste good'.