Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific details about when you eat snacks, if at all. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: I usually avoid eating snacks because I follow a healthy diet. However, if I do eat snacks, it is usually in the afternoon when I feel a bit hungry between meals.

제안: Your answer has some good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and structure issues. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain both advantages and disadvantages of eating snacks. Be specific and concise.

예시: I think eating snacks can be both good and bad. For example, snacks can help you relax when you are stressed, but eating too many unhealthy snacks can lead to weight gain and health problems.

제안: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear topic sentence about your snacking habits as a child, followed by specific details or examples. Use simple sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I used to enjoy eating biscuits and sweets after school, which made me very happy.

제안: Your answer contains some good points but is confusing and has many errors. Try to clearly state which snacks you like and why, using correct grammar and linking words. Keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

예시: I like to eat sweet snacks such as chocolate and candy because they help me relax after a long day. However, I know they are not very healthy, so I only eat them occasionally.

× No, I need I follow the healthy diet so I'm didn't.

✓ No, I need to follow a healthy diet so I didn't.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I need I follow' instead of 'I need to follow'. Also, 'I'm didn't' is incorrect; it should be 'I didn't'. Modal verbs like 'need' require the infinitive form 'to follow'.

× I never it snake.

✓ I never eat snacks.

The sentence uses 'it snake' which is incorrect. The correct pronoun and noun should be 'eat snacks'. 'It' is not appropriate here, and 'snake' is a misspelling of 'snack'.

× I think everything will have to face it is very it's have a fantastic when you feel very stressed and it make you feel more relax and unwind, but in sometime in the drawbacks.

✓ I think everyone has to face stress; it can be fantastic when you feel very stressed because it makes you feel more relaxed and helps you unwind, but sometimes there are drawbacks.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Everything will have to face it' is incorrect; 'everyone has to face stress' is clearer. 'It's have a fantastic' is incorrect; 'it can be fantastic' is correct. 'It make you feel more relax' should be 'it makes you feel more relaxed'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammar.

× It can make you feel fat and have a lot of disease.

✓ It can make you gain weight and cause many diseases.

'Feel fat' is not a standard expression; 'gain weight' is more appropriate. 'A lot of disease' should be plural 'many diseases' to match the plural form.

× I think it's nice is like then there's them that right hold activities that every child children.

✓ I think it's nice because there are activities that every child can participate in.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns and words. 'There's them that right hold activities' is incorrect; it should be 'there are activities'. 'Child children' is redundant; 'child' or 'children' is sufficient.

× Did Anne? I did it too, I eat a large when I was more and it makes me feel very happy.

✓ Did I? I did too. I ate a lot when I was younger and it made me feel very happy.

'Did Anne?' is unclear; assuming 'Did I?'. 'I eat a large' should be past tense 'I ate a lot'. 'When I was more' is incorrect; 'when I was younger' is appropriate. 'It makes me feel' should be past tense 'it made me feel' to match the past context.

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✓ I enjoy eating sweet snacks like chocolate and candy because they help me relax after a long day, although I know they are not very healthy. Sometimes I turn to them when I want to feel more comfortable, especially when I feel stressed.

'Sweet snake' should be 'sweet snacks'. The sentence is very confusing and contains many errors. 'I sometimes drink myself to them' is incorrect; 'I sometimes turn to them' is appropriate. The latter part of the sentence is unclear and has been simplified for clarity and correctness.