Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免拼写错误，并且回答时要更直接地回应问题，避免冗长和不连贯。

예시: I usually eat snacks late in the evening when I stay up. Sometimes, I scroll through my phone to find snacks online, or I look around my room to see if I have any.

제안: 回答中语法和表达混乱，建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并用具体原因支持观点，注意词汇的准确使用。

예시: I don't think eating snacks, especially at night, is healthy because our stomach needs time to digest food. Eating late can lead to weight gain.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，建议使用完整句子，注意时态一致，并且提供具体细节使回答更丰富。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I loved junk food like chocolate and fried chicken. My parents used to take me to KFC for snacks.

제안: 回答中语法和词汇使用不当，建议用正确的时态和词汇表达喜好，并且结构清晰，避免模糊表达。

예시: It depends. When I was a child, I liked fried chicken. As I grew older, I enjoyed a variety of snacks, such as sweets, milk drinks, and chocolate.

× I will probably a scroll through my mobile phone to see if there is any snacks links in the website an I can purchase it.

✓ I will probably scroll through my mobile phone to see if there are any snack links on the website and I can purchase them.

这里错误地使用了不定式前加了冠词'a'，正确用法是直接用动词原形'scroll'。另外，'snacks links'应为复数形式'snack links'，且'links'前应使用复数动词'are'，'in the website'应改为'on the website'，'it'指代复数应改为'them'。

× if there is any snacks links in the website an I can purchase it.

✓ if there are any snack links on the website and I can purchase them.

'snacks links'应为复数形式'snack links'，且谓语动词应与复数主语一致，使用'are'而非'is'。此外，'in the website'应改为'on the website'，'it'指代复数应改为'them'。

× in the website an I can purchase it.

✓ on the website and I can purchase them.

英语中通常用'on the website'表示在网站上，而不是'in the website'。

× And our surge around my room to find if there's something to it.

✓ And I search around my room to find if there's something to eat.

原句中'our surge'应为'I search'，且'search'是动词，不能用作名词。

× And our surge around my room to find if there's something to it.

✓ And I search around my room to find if there's something to eat.

'our surge'应为'I search'，'it'指代不明确，应改为'to eat'表示寻找可吃的东西。

× Not really. I don't think it's healthy too is next foods especially in the evening because our store makes need to digest everything's an especially in the evening and we don't know a lot, so it might increase the fat or calories in our body.

✓ Not really. I don't think it's healthy to eat snacks especially in the evening because our stomach needs to digest everything, and especially in the evening we don't move a lot, so it might increase fat or calories in our body.

原句中'too is next foods'应为'to eat snacks'，'our store'应为'our stomach'，'everything's an'应为'everything,'，'we don't know a lot'应为'we don't move a lot'，'increase the fat or calories'应为'increase fat or calories'。

× I remember that when I was a child, my parents will bring me to the web, brought me to the KFC to have some snacks.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, my parents would bring me to the web, brought me to the KFC to have some snacks.

描述过去习惯动作时，'will'应改为过去式助动词'would'。

× my parents will bring me to the web, brought me to the KFC to have some snacks.

✓ my parents would bring me to the web, bring me to KFC to have some snacks.

'the web'可能是误用，应为'web'或其他词，且'KFC'前不需要冠词'the'。

× as such house we all love junk foods like the sugar chocolate.

✓ As such, we all love junk food like sugar and chocolate.

'junk foods'通常用不可数名词'junk food'，'the sugar chocolate'应为'sugar and chocolate'。

× When I was a little child, I like the fried chickens.

✓ When I was a little child, I liked fried chicken.

'fried chickens'应为不可数名词'fried chicken'，且时态应为过去时'liked'。

× When I was a little child, I like the fried chickens.

✓ When I was a little child, I liked fried chicken.

描述过去的喜好，动词应使用过去时'liked'。

× And as I grew up, I live and different range of the snacks from the sugar to the milk drink.

✓ And as I grew up, I like a different range of snacks from sugar to milk drinks.

'live'应为'like'，'and different range'应为'a different range'，'the sugar'和'the milk drink'应去掉定冠词，且'milk drink'应为复数'milk drinks'。

× Till the chocolate is so mad.

✓ Till the chocolate is so mad.

该句语义不清，可能想表达'chocolate is so good'或类似意思，建议改为'Till I like chocolate so much.'。