Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is too short and contains incomplete sentences. Try to give a complete, natural response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and explain your reasons more clearly.

예시: I usually avoid eating snacks these days because I am concerned about gaining weight. For example, I prefer to eat healthy meals instead of sugary or fatty snacks.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many incomplete sentences and errors. Focus on forming complete sentences and explaining your opinion clearly with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy ingredients. Therefore, I try to avoid them to maintain good health.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to incomplete sentences and unclear ideas. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and use proper sentence structure.

예시: When I was young, I often ate snacks because I loved the different tastes, such as sweet and bitter flavors. My mom sometimes tried to limit my snack intake because she was concerned about my health.

제안: Your answer is better but still has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and correct vocabulary. Explain your preferences clearly and avoid unclear expressions like "fabric flag."

예시: I grew up in Korea, so I used to enjoy Korean snacks like chocolate chip cookies and Pringles. They are quite sweet and have always been my favourite snacks.

× I don't usually eat snacks now because.

✓ I don't usually eat snacks now because it is easy to gain weight.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'because' without completing the reason, resulting in a sentence structure error. The correction completes the sentence by adding the reason, making it a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× I don't think it is healthy for.

✓ I don't think it is healthy for me.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'for', causing a sentence structure error. Adding 'me' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Is next because.

✓ It is not healthy because

The phrase 'Is next because' is unclear and incomplete, causing a sentence structure error. Replacing it with 'It is not healthy because' clarifies the intended meaning and corrects the sentence.

× This next includes a lot of sugar.

✓ This snack includes a lot of sugar.

The word 'next' is a typo or incorrect word choice; it should be 'snack'. Correcting the word resolves the sentence structure and meaning issue.

× And that it things.

✓ And that kind of thing.

The phrase 'And that it things' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. Changing it to 'And that kind of thing' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× To keep my huffy.

✓ To keep my health.

The word 'huffy' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'health'. Correcting this word fixes the sentence meaning and structure.

× When I was young I always a flex because.

✓ When I was young, I always ate snacks because

The phrase 'I always a flex' is incorrect; it should be 'I always ate snacks'. Adding a comma after 'young' improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× It makes me crazy.

✓ They made me crazy.

The subject refers to snacks in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'made' and plural 'they' to agree with 'snacks'.

× About the taste like such as like sweet, bitter.

✓ Because of the taste, such as sweet and bitter flavors.

The original phrase is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it as a complete phrase clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Things, yeah.

✓ Yes, those things.

The phrase 'Things, yeah.' is incomplete and informal. Replacing it with 'Yes, those things.' makes it clearer and more grammatically correct.

× It attracts me a lot so my mom tries to. Try.

✓ They attracted me a lot, so my mom tried to stop me.

The sentence is incomplete and has tense inconsistency. Changing to past tense and completing the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× I grew up in Korea, so I used to eat Korean snacks such as chocolate chip cookies and Pringles.

✓ I grew up in Korea, so I used to eat Korean snacks such as rice cakes and tteokbokki.

Chocolate chip cookies and Pringles are not Korean snacks. Replacing them with typical Korean snacks improves accuracy and appropriateness.

× It's really sweet an attract me a lot.

✓ They're really sweet and attract me a lot.

'It's' should be 'They're' to agree with plural 'snacks'. Also, 'an' is a typo for 'and'. Correcting these improves subject-verb agreement and conjunction use.

× So. Until now, it's my fabric flag.

✓ So, until now, it's my favourite snack.

The phrase 'fabric flag' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends 'favourite snack'. Correcting this fixes the sentence meaning and structure.