Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence describing the typical weather, then give one or two specific supporting details (seasons, extremes) using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: The weather where I live is generally mild, but we have distinct rainy, winter and summer seasons. For example, summers can be quite hot and humid, while winters are cool and sometimes rainy, so each season feels very different.

제안: Answer directly with a reason, then add one or two specific examples. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and avoid irrelevant details.

예시: I prefer hot weather because I enjoy outdoor activities in the sun. For instance, I like drinking fresh juices and smoothies and eating ice cream when it's warm, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

제안: Give a clear preference with a reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, therefore, however) and correct basic grammar (I prefer, not I'm preferred).

예시: I prefer dry weather because it is safer and more convenient for travelling. For example, driving or riding a motorcycle is much easier on dry roads, whereas heavy rain can make the roads slippery and dangerous.

제안: Answer with a simple routine statement, then give specific timing and purpose. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing; avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast on my phone before going out. For instance, I check it every morning and again before travelling so I can decide what to wear and whether to take an umbrella.

제안: Provide a clear main point and then two specific, concrete effects with linking words (for example, as a result). Use precise vocabulary (temperature rise, extreme weather, sea-level rise).

예시: Climate change has caused more frequent extreme weather and rising temperatures. For example, we have seen hotter summers and heavier storms in recent years, which can damage crops and cause floods.

제안: Answer directly, state the reason and give a specific example or plan. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid repetition and unclear phrasing.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a colder city because I have never experienced sustained cold and snow. For example, I would love to go to a mountain town in winter to see snowfall and try winter sports like skiing.

× Volume in my place the weather is a neutral and sometime in sometime the rainy season or the winter season or summer season and it gives the every type of experience of different kind of seasons.

✓ In my area the weather is generally mild; sometimes there is a rainy season, sometimes winter, and sometimes summer, so I experience many different kinds of seasons.

Original sentence has poor word order, extra words, and unclear structure (Grammar Problem Type 26). Reorganize into coherent clauses: state location, describe usual condition, then list seasons with appropriate connectors. Use 'generally mild' instead of 'a neutral' and 'sometimes there is' for existence of seasons.

× I mostly prefer hot weather and it gave me to drink more juices and my favorite smoothies and I also like to eat ice creams in hot weather and it gave me the proper sunny feel.

✓ I mostly prefer hot weather because it makes me drink more juices and my favorite smoothies; I also like to eat ice cream in hot weather since it gives me a proper sunny feeling.

Original mixes past tense 'gave' with present preference and uses incorrect noun forms (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use present tense consistent with habitual preference: 'makes me drink' and 'gives me'. Use uncountable 'ice cream' and 'feeling' for the abstract sensation.

× I'm preferred dry weather as it's a good to travel to anywhere but in wet weather we don't have a opportunity to travel and it get it also. Wet. On roads and also risky to travel and drive, car or bike.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it is easier to travel anywhere; in wet weather we often don't have the opportunity to travel because the roads become wet and it is risky to drive a car or ride a bike.

Original uses incorrect verb form 'I'm preferred' and awkward pronouns and fragments (Grammar Problem Type 12). Change to simple present 'I prefer'. Use 'opportunity' with article 'an' or restructure as 'the opportunity'. Combine fragments into complete sentences and use correct verbs 'become' and 'is risky' for clarity.

× Yes I do checking the habit of forecast in my mobile phone as when I travel to some somewhere or I want to plan to go out then I'm check the weather or forecast in advance that keep me more safe.

✓ Yes, I check the weather forecast on my mobile phone; when I plan to go out or travel somewhere, I check the forecast in advance to keep myself safe.

Original uses incorrect verb forms 'do checking' and 'I'm check' and odd phrasing (Grammar Problem Type 26). Use simple present 'I check' for habitual action, 'check the forecast' is standard, and 'to keep myself safe' is the correct reflexive pronoun and purpose clause.

× Well, there are a number of effects of climate change in the past years as the in hot weather the temperature go like more hot and in cold weather temperature is more cold so the fluctuation.

✓ Well, there have been a number of effects of climate change in recent years: in hot weather the temperature becomes higher, and in cold weather the temperature becomes lower, so there are greater fluctuations.

Original mixes present with 'in the past years' and uses incorrect verb forms 'go like more hot' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use present perfect 'have been' for recent changes, 'becomes higher/lower' for change in temperature, and 'fluctuations' for variation. Avoid informal 'like' and incorrect word order.

× Yes, of course I want to travel to another city that weather is like cold as my own. In my place the weather is a a neutral, sometimes colds and sometimes cold. But I need a whole cold weather and it I also like to the snow.

✓ Yes, of course I want to travel to another city where the weather is colder than where I live. At my place the weather is generally mild; sometimes it is cool, sometimes warm. But I would like to experience a fully cold climate and I also like to see snow.

Original has incorrect relative clause 'that weather is like cold as my own', repetition, article errors, and fragments (Grammar Problem Type 26). Use 'where' for location clauses, comparative 'colder than', 'generally mild' for neutral weather, and 'I would like to experience' for polite desire. Use 'see snow' rather than incorrect 'to the snow'.