Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce small grammar errors and improve sentence cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'do' → 'doing') and avoid slight redundancy.

예시: We have two main seasons: a dry season and a wet season. I prefer the dry season because it is usually sunny and I can spend time outdoors, for example going to the beach or exercising in the park, without worrying about rain.

제안: Fix small grammar issues and make sentences more concise. Use linking words like 'however' and correct mistakes ('and and', 'it's gets' → 'it gets'). Give a brief explanation and a specific example.

예시: I prefer cool weather, ideally around 15 to 20°C. However, if the temperature drops much below that, it becomes uncomfortable and can be harmful, for instance when people don't have adequate warm clothing.

제안: Improve sentence structure and add linking words for clarity. Break long sentences into a topic sentence and a supporting detail. Correct articles and phrasing (e.g., 'if there's a rain' → 'if it rains', 'cause flood that easily' → 'cause flooding easily').

예시: I prefer dry weather because it allows more outdoor activities. For example, heavy rain often causes flooding here due to poor drainage, which makes travel difficult and disrupts daily life.

제안: Good structure and detail. Make minor wording adjustments for naturalness and consistency in tense (e.g., 'If I am' → 'When I'm' and 'I will always' → 'I always'). Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: When I'm at home I usually don't check the forecast because the climate is fairly predictable: dry from January to May and wet from July onward. However, I always check the weather a few days before traveling abroad so I can pack the right clothes.

제안: Correct grammar and clarity issues and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., 'mean you from burning fossils'). Use cohesive linking and be specific with examples. Keep sentences concise and accurate.

예시: I think rising greenhouse gas emissions from burning fossil fuels have caused global warming. Consequently, we are seeing more extreme events, such as intense heat waves, heavier rainfall and floods in some regions, occasional cold snaps in others, and rising sea levels.

제안: Fix repetition and grammatical mistakes, and combine sentences to be more coherent. Remove unclear fragments ('we have we don't have the winter', 'experience the IT'). Provide one specific reason or activity you want to try in winter.

예시: Definitely. I'm planning to visit Seoul in December to experience a true winter with snow. Since the Philippines only has dry and wet seasons, I want to try winter activities like building a snowman and wearing warm clothes with my family.

× I prefer the dry season because even though it can be very hot, I enjoy going out and do many things outside rather than getting soaked.

✓ I prefer the dry season because even though it can be very hot, I enjoy going out and doing many things outside rather than getting soaked.

After 'enjoy' a gerund (-ing form) is required, not the base verb. Use 'doing' instead of 'do' to match correct verb pattern: 'enjoy doing something'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× If it's gets colder than that, it becomes uncomfortable and can even be harmful to our body, especially if we don't have warm clothes.

✓ If it gets colder than that, it becomes uncomfortable and can even be harmful to our bodies, especially if we don't have warm clothes.

Remove the extra contraction error 'it's gets' to 'it gets' (subject 'it' + verb 'gets'). Also use plural 'bodies' when referring to people in general. This corrects tense and noun number agreement. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I prefer the dry weather because you can do many things outside your home and here in our country if there's a rain it can cause flood that easily because we don't have any proper drainage system.

✓ I prefer dry weather because you can do many things outside your home, and here in our country if it rains it can cause floods easily because we don't have a proper drainage system.

Use 'dry weather' (no 'the' needed) and replace 'there's a rain' with 'it rains' for natural expression. 'Cause flood that easily' should be 'cause floods easily' (plural) and use 'a proper drainage system' for correct article use. Also add a comma and conjunction for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:17

× If I am in my home country, I usually don't check the forecast because the climate is predictable.

✓ If I am in my home country, I usually don't check the forecast because the climate is predictable.

No grammatical correction needed for tense; sentence is correct. (Included only if mapping to list required.) Grammar problem type ID:6

× However, when I am traveling abroad, I will always check the weather for a few days before my trip so I can pack appropriate clothing.

✓ However, when I am travelling abroad, I always check the weather for a few days before my trip so I can pack appropriate clothing.

For habitual actions in the present while travelling, the present simple ('I always check') or present continuous with habitual marker is preferable to 'will always' which implies future. Also choose British spelling 'travelling' if consistent; both spellings acceptable. This aligns tense with habitual meaning. Grammar problem type ID:7

× I believe the increase in greenhouse gases mean you from burning fossils has led the global warming.

✓ I believe the increase in greenhouse gases from burning fossil fuels has led to global warming.

The original sentence has word order and missing words issues. 'Mean you' is incorrect; remove it. Use 'from burning fossil fuels' to show cause, and 'has led to global warming' (include 'to'). Also 'fossil fuels' plural is correct. Grammar problem type ID:26

× As a result we are seeing more extreme weather now, hotter heat waves, heavy rainfall and floods in some places and unusually cold snaps in others, as well as rising sea levels.

✓ As a result, we are seeing more extreme weather now: hotter heat waves, heavy rainfall and floods in some places, unusually cold snaps in others, as well as rising sea levels.

Minor punctuation and parallelism corrections improve clarity. Tense 'are seeing' is correct for current trends. Use commas and colon for listing and remove redundant conjunction 'and'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Definitely yes. This year I am planning to go to Seoul, Korea in December to experience the winter season there.

✓ Definitely. This year I am planning to go to Seoul, South Korea in December to experience the winter there.

'Definitely yes' is colloquial; 'Definitely' alone is cleaner. Use 'South Korea' for clarity. 'Winter season' can be shortened to 'winter'. Tense 'am planning' is correct for near-future plans. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Since here in the Philippines we only have dry and wet seasons we have we don't have the winter.

✓ Since here in the Philippines we only have dry and wet seasons, we don't have winter.

Remove extra 'we have' which is redundant and incorrect. Omit 'the' before 'winter' when speaking generally. Add a comma after the subordinate clause for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:16

× So I want to experience the IT with my family.

✓ So I want to experience it with my family.

Do not capitalize 'IT'; use lowercase 'it'. Also 'experience it' is sufficient; no article needed. Ensure pronoun 'it' clearly refers to 'winter'. Grammar problem type ID:12}]}