Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai (ví dụ: "count traffic deposits" không đúng). Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất và ảnh hưởng lên sinh hoạt. Giữ tối đa 5 câu, dùng từ chính xác như "cause traffic jams" hoặc "reduce visibility".

예시: I live in Holloway City, where the weather is usually hot and very humid, especially in the rainy season. Heavy afternoon showers often cause traffic jams and reduce visibility. The high humidity makes the heat feel oppressive, so many people prefer to stay indoors during the hottest hours.

제안: Cần sửa một vài từ sai (ví dụ: "squiddy" không phù hợp) và làm rõ lý do bằng ví dụ cụ thể. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nối với liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để mạch lạc. Giữ ngắn gọn và tự nhiên.

예시: I prefer cold weather because high humidity makes me feel sticky and uncomfortable when I commute or exercise. In cold weather I can walk for hours comfortably and layer clothing to stay warm, so I find it easier to relax.

제안: Câu trả lời lộn xộn với nhiều lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc ("right weather", "I'm friends often get disturbed", "meet the train to meet"). Nên trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer dry weather) và giải thích rõ với 1-2 ví dụ cụ thể, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh câu dài rối.

예시: I prefer dry weather because rain prevents many outdoor activities. For example, I often cannot play football with my friends when it rains, and public transport is delayed, so our plans are frequently disrupted.

제안: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng có thể làm rõ tần suất hơn (daily, sometimes) và thêm 1 chi tiết về nguồn thông tin. Duy trì cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + chi tiết + ví dụ. Giữ ngắn gọn và tự nhiên.

예시: I usually check the weather forecast on my phone every morning before I leave so I can decide what to wear and whether to take an umbrella. If the forecast predicts heavy rain, I also check transit updates and may choose a different route to avoid delays.

제안: Ý chính tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi và từ không chính xác ("mild weakened heat", "with many development on"). Cần nêu rõ hậu quả cụ thể (flooding, heatwaves, sea level rise) và liên kết lý do-kết quả bằng từ nối như "therefore" hoặc "as a result". Giữ 2-3 câu rõ ràng.

예시: Human activities, especially greenhouse gas emissions from industry and transport, have contributed significantly to climate change. As a result, we are seeing more extreme events such as stronger storms, more frequent heatwaves, and rising sea levels that affect communities and agriculture.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý nhưng chứa lỗi ("We think basic with very different weather is a bright way"). Nên trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề (Yes, I would) và giải thích lý do cụ thể, kèm ví dụ cá nhân. Dùng từ đúng và mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because a change of weather helps me relax after a busy period. For example, I enjoy visiting Japan in spring for its cool, pleasant climate and often travel there with my family for a short holiday.

× Heavy afternoon rains and dark clouds often count traffic deposits, and the high humidity makes the heat feel oppressive, so people usually prefer to stay indoors.

✓ Heavy afternoon rains and dark clouds often cause traffic disruptions, and the high humidity makes the heat feel oppressive, so people usually prefer to stay indoors.

The original sentence uses 'count traffic deposits', which is not a correct English phrase. The intended meaning is likely that rain disrupts traffic. Replace with 'cause traffic disruptions' to express that meaning. Also keep the parallel clause structure by connecting causes and effects clearly. Suggestion: use common collocations such as 'cause traffic disruptions' or 'disrupt traffic'.

× I don't like hot weather because high humidity often makes me feel uncomfortable and squiddy when I commute or exercise.

✓ I don't like hot weather because high humidity often makes me feel uncomfortable and squeamish when I commute or exercise.

The word 'squiddy' is not an appropriate adjective in this context. The correct word is likely 'squeamish' (feeling uneasy or nauseous) or 'sticky' (feeling damp and uncomfortable). Choose 'squeamish' if referring to nausea, or 'sticky' to describe humidity. Ensure use of established adjectives.

× I prefer right weather especially when it rains because I can't do many outdoor activities.

✓ I prefer dry weather, especially because when it rains I can't do many outdoor activities.

'Right weather' is not a correct collocation. The speaker contrasts wet and dry weather, so use 'dry weather'. Also improve sentence flow by moving 'especially' and clarifying the reason clause. Use 'because when it rains' to link cause and effect.

× For example, I can't play football with my friends and I'm friends often get disturbed so we sometimes meet the train to meet, which is frustrating because I really enjoy talking and spending time with them.

✓ For example, I can't play football with my friends, and my friends often get delayed, so we sometimes miss the train to meet, which is frustrating because I really enjoy talking and spending time with them.

Multiple errors: 'I'm friends' is incorrect pronoun/verb use; should be 'my friends'. 'Get disturbed' is not the best collocation for being delayed; use 'get delayed'. 'Meet the train to meet' is unclear; likely intended 'miss the train to meet' meaning they miss meeting due to delays. Clarify sequence and use correct verbs for intended meaning.

× For example, if the forecast says there's a chance of rain, I will take an umbrella and sometimes I choose a different route.

✓ For example, if the forecast says there's a chance of rain, I take an umbrella and sometimes choose a different route.

In conditional sentences about habitual actions, use present simple in both clauses ('if... says' and main clause present simple) rather than 'will'. Using 'will' is not wrong but using simple present is more natural for habitual behavior. Also remove the redundant 'I' before 'choose' for concision.

× As a result, we are seeing more extreme weather events, for example, stronger storms and mild weakened heat, with many development on.

✓ As a result, we are seeing more extreme weather events, for example, stronger storms and milder heat, with many developments occurring.

'Mild weakened heat' is ungrammatical; use 'milder heat' to indicate increased variations in temperature. 'Many development on' is incorrect; likely intended 'many developments occurring' or 'many areas developing'. Use correct adjective form 'milder' and correct noun plural 'developments' plus a suitable verb.

× Yes, absolutely. We think basic with very different weather is a bright way to unwind after a busy period.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I think a break in a place with very different weather is a great way to unwind after a busy period.

Sentence uses 'We think basic' which is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'I think a break in a place with very different weather' to match singular speaker and intended meaning. 'Bright way' is awkward; 'great way' is natural. Ensure pronoun matches speaker 'I' since the student is answering personally.

× For example, I love the cool, relaxing climate in Japan and usually go there with my family for a short holiday in spring.

✓ For example, I love the cool, relaxing climate in Japan and usually go there with my family for a short holiday in the spring.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'spring' when referring to the season in this habitual context in natural English: 'for a short holiday in the spring.' The rest of the sentence is appropriate present simple to describe a habitual action.