Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

예시: I live in Canada, where we experience four distinct seasons: summer, fall, winter, and spring. My favourite season is summer because we can enjoy many outdoor activities like hiking and swimming.

제안: Make your answer more structured and natural by starting with a clear preference, then explaining with specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid informal language like 'wanna' and correct grammar.

예시: I prefer cold weather because it's simpler to dress warmly with just a jacket and a blanket. For instance, when I go for a walk, I only need to put on a jacket, which is convenient.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words and avoid vague phrases like 'wear everything'.

예시: I prefer dry weather because it's easier to choose clothes. For example, when I go grocery shopping, I don't have to wear heavy rain gear, which makes going out more comfortable.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I often check the weather forecast, especially in fall, winter, and spring because Vancouver's weather can be unpredictable. For example, before going grocery shopping, I check the forecast to decide what to wear.

제안: Provide a clearer and more detailed answer. Start with a topic sentence, then explain with specific effects using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: I believe climate change has caused temperatures to rise in recent years, which affects people's health and the environment. For example, warmer weather can lead to more heatwaves and impact agriculture.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For instance, during Vancouver's cold winters, I prefer to travel to tropical places to enjoy sunshine and warmth.

× I live in Canada so we have Four Seasons every year from summer, winter, spring and fall.

✓ I live in Canada so we have four seasons every year: summer, winter, spring, and fall.

The word 'Four Seasons' should not be capitalized and 'seasons' should be in lowercase. Also, a colon is appropriate before listing the seasons. This improves clarity and follows standard English conventions.

× The most favorite season I have I want so far is summer.

✓ My favourite season so far is summer.

The phrase 'most favorite' is redundant; 'favorite' alone suffices. Also, 'I have I want' is incorrect and unnecessary. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× We can enjoy lots of activities.

✓ We can enjoy lots of activities.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no change.

× That's a hard question, but I prefer cold weather as it's easier to just wear a jacket and blanket.

✓ That's a hard question, but I prefer cold weather as it's easier to just wear a jacket and a blanket.

The noun 'blanket' requires an article 'a' to be grammatically correct when singular and countable.

× For example if you go outside for fun or you wanna go for a walk, you can just wear a jacket to.

✓ For example, if you go outside for fun or want to go for a walk, you can just wear a jacket too.

A comma is needed after 'For example' to separate the introductory phrase. 'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to'. The word 'to' at the end should be 'too' to mean 'also'.

× I prefer dry weather because it's easier to dress up in the dry weather.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it's easier to dress up in dry weather.

Repeating 'the dry weather' is redundant; removing the second 'the' improves flow and correctness.

× For example, if you need to go somewhere just to buy grocery, you don't need to wear everything before you can go out.

✓ For example, if you need to go somewhere just to buy groceries, you don't need to wear everything before you go out.

'Grocery' should be plural 'groceries' when referring to items to buy. Also, 'before you can go out' is better as 'before you go out' for natural phrasing.

× I often check the weather forecast, specially in the fall and winter and spring as the weather here in Vancouver is very unpredictable at times.

✓ I often check the weather forecast, especially in the fall, winter, and spring, as the weather here in Vancouver is very unpredictable at times.

'Specially' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'especially'. Commas are added for clarity in listing seasons.

× For example, when I need to go out and buy grocery, I would check the weather first so I know what dress should I wear for the day.

✓ For example, when I need to go out and buy groceries, I check the weather first so I know what clothes I should wear for the day.

'Buy grocery' should be 'buy groceries'. 'I would check' is better as 'I check' for habitual action. The question form 'what dress should I wear' should be statement form 'what clothes I should wear'.

× I think the effect of climate change in recent years vary.

✓ I think the effects of climate change in recent years vary.

'Effect' should be plural 'effects' to agree with the plural verb 'vary' and to reflect multiple impacts.

× Hard on people because it's getting warmer nowadays because of the climate change.

✓ It is hard on people because it's getting warmer nowadays due to climate change.

The original sentence is a fragment missing a subject. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence. 'Because of the climate change' is better as 'due to climate change' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I would love to visit other cities, but it depends on the current weather that where I live in right now.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit other cities, but it depends on the current weather where I live right now.

The phrase 'that where I live in' is incorrect; 'where I live' suffices. Also, 'in' at the end is unnecessary.

× For example, if we are experiencing winter here in Vancouver, I'd like to visit tropical areas so that I can enjoy the sunshine and the warm place.

✓ For example, if we are experiencing winter here in Vancouver, I'd like to visit tropical areas so that I can enjoy the sunshine and the warm weather.

'Warm place' is awkward; 'warm weather' is the correct collocation to describe climate conditions.