Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 전반적으로 자연스럽고 내용도 충실하지만, 'distant seasons'는 'distinct seasons'로 수정하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 'Winter'의 첫 글자는 소문자로 통일하는 것이 좋습니다. 문장 간 연결을 위해 'For example,' 같은 연결어를 사용하면 더 논리적입니다.

예시: The weather where I live changes throughout the year with four distinct seasons: spring, summer, fall, and winter. For example, summer is extremely hot and humid, with temperatures often reaching around 40 degrees Celsius, while winter can be quite cold and dry. Overall, the climate varies a lot depending on the season.

제안: 답변이 명확하지만, 'take shower with regularly'는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'take a shower regularly'로 수정하고, 문장 간 연결을 위해 'Moreover,' 같은 연결어를 사용하면 좋습니다.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I really dislike humidity, which makes me feel uncomfortable. Moreover, mosquitoes tend to bite me a lot even though I always keep myself clean and take a shower regularly. So, cold weather is much better for me since it keeps mosquitoes away and feels fresher.

제안: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이며 연결도 잘 되어 있습니다. 다만, 'especially when it is hot' 부분을 문장 앞에 배치하여 강조하면 더 효과적일 것입니다.

예시: I especially prefer dry weather when it is hot because it is more comfortable. In dry weather, the air feels fresher, and when you stand in the shade, a cool breeze often makes it pleasant. Also, dry weather is easier to endure than humid weather, which can feel sticky and uncomfortable.

제안: 답변이 명확하고 자연스럽지만, 'Because of that' 대신 'As a result' 또는 'Therefore' 같은 연결어를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Actually, I'm not in the habit of tracking the weather forecast regularly, so I often forget to bring my umbrella when it rains. As a result, I sometimes have to go back home to get it. However, recently I've started checking the forecast before going to bed to avoid this problem.

제안: 내용이 좋으나, 'They make it difficult'에서 주어가 불명확하고, 'This hot only affects me personally'는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'This heat not only affects me personally but also causes problems like droughts.'로 수정하고, 문장 연결을 명확히 해야 합니다.

예시: I think climate change has had significant effects in recent years. For example, during the summer, the weather has become extremely hot, sometimes reaching unbearable temperatures, which makes it difficult to stay outside for long. This heat not only affects me personally but also causes problems like droughts.

제안: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적입니다. 다만, 'snowy city' 대신 'a snowy city'로 수정하고, 문장 간 연결을 위해 'Moreover,' 같은 연결어를 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit other cities with different climates because experiencing new weather conditions is always fascinating. For example, I want to feel the extreme cold of a snowy city, which is very different from the mild climate where I live. Moreover, it would be exciting to see how people adapt to such environments and enjoy unique activities.

× Also mosquitoes tend to bite me a lot even though I always keep myself clean and take shower with regularly.

✓ Also mosquitoes tend to bite me a lot even though I always keep myself clean and take showers regularly.

The phrase 'take shower with regularly' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'take showers regularly' because 'shower' is a countable noun here and needs an article or plural form. Also, 'with' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× This hot only affects me personally, but also causes problems like droughts.

✓ This heat not only affects me personally, but also causes problems like droughts.

The phrase 'This hot' is incorrect because 'hot' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun here. The correct noun is 'heat'. Also, the sentence structure 'not only... but also...' was missing 'not' before 'only', which is necessary for the correlative conjunction.