Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, 'it have' should be 'it has'. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas like 'summer and winter season mostly' and 'both the summer as well as the winter season'. Try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

예시: I live in Amritsar, Punjab, where we experience mainly two seasons: hot, humid summers and cold winters. The weather changes drastically between these seasons, which allows us to enjoy both comfortably.

제안: Your answer has good content but some sentences are long and slightly unclear. Avoid repetition like 'sunny sunny days' and correct grammar errors such as 'one usually avoid' to 'one usually avoids'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to improve coherence.

예시: I prefer cold weather because, even if it is frosty, the sunny days allow us to enjoy outdoor activities. However, hot weather with its scorching heat often makes people avoid going outside.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'dry weathers' instead of 'dry weather' and '1 has to' instead of 'one has to'. Also, avoid repeating 'actually' twice. Try to use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas.

예시: I prefer dry weather because it is more convenient; we can easily go out and complete our chores. However, during wet weather, one often has to rely on vehicles like cars or auto rickshaws, which is not always feasible.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'for cost' and 'hectic thing just checking your phone again'. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas.

예시: I don't check the weather forecast daily; however, I do so before important events like exams or interviews. Otherwise, I prefer not to check it frequently as it can be distracting.

제안: Your answer contains relevant points but lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Phrases like 'more and more winter is going out' are unclear. Also, the last sentence is incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly', and provide complete thoughts.

예시: Firstly, global warming has caused the Earth's average temperature to rise, leading to melting glaciers and shorter winters. Secondly, climate change has contributed to increased deforestation, which further impacts the environment.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has some grammatical errors and repetitions like 'see see'. Also, 'even ever if' should be 'even if'. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words like 'therefore' or 'so' appropriately.

예시: Yes, I am an adventurous person who enjoys exploring different cities, their cultures, and cuisines. Therefore, if I get a chance, I would definitely visit other cities to experience their different climates compared to my own.

× I live in Amritsar which is a part of Punjab state and it have summer and winter season mostly.

✓ I live in Amritsar which is a part of Punjab state and it has summer and winter seasons mostly.

The subject 'it' refers to Amritsar, which is singular, so the verb should be 'has' (third person singular). Also, 'season' should be plural as there are two seasons mentioned: summer and winter.

× It has a drastic change of weather from summer to winter season so we enjoy both the summer as well as the winter season.

✓ It has a drastic change of weather from summer to winter seasons so we enjoy both the summer as well as the winter seasons.

Since both summer and winter are mentioned, 'season' should be plural 'seasons' to correctly refer to both.

× one usually avoid to go out.

✓ one usually avoids going out.

The subject 'one' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'avoids' not 'avoid'. Also, 'avoid to go out' is incorrect; the correct form is 'avoids going out'.

× I actually prefer dry weather more than that of the wet weather, but it actually depends on the mood.

✓ I actually prefer dry weather more than wet weather, but it actually depends on the mood.

The phrase 'that of the wet weather' is unnecessarily complex and can be simplified. Also, 'wet weather' is uncountable here, so no article is needed.

× in the wet weather 1 has to rely on the other modes of transport such as cars or the auto rickshaws, which is not possible in every situation.

✓ in the wet weather one has to rely on other modes of transport such as cars or auto rickshaws, which is not possible in every situation.

The pronoun '1' is a typo and should be 'one'. Also, 'the other modes' should be 'other modes' without 'the' because it refers generally. Similarly, 'the auto rickshaws' should be 'auto rickshaws'.

× I'm actually not in the habit of checking the weather forecast on a daily basis, but I do check it out whenever I need to go out for doing the important tasks or the important work, such as giving an exam or going for some sort of interview.

✓ I'm actually not in the habit of checking the weather forecast on a daily basis, but I do check it out whenever I need to go out to do important tasks or important work, such as giving an exam or going for some sort of interview.

The phrase 'go out for doing' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' followed by the base verb: 'go out to do'.

× Other than that, I usually prefer not to check the weather for cost because it's a bit hectic thing just checking your phone again.

✓ Other than that, I usually prefer not to check the weather forecast because it's a bit hectic just checking your phone again.

The phrase 'for cost' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'forecast'. Also, 'a bit hectic thing' is awkward; 'a bit hectic' suffices.

× I think global warming is the 1st and the major change which is the average increase in the overall temperature of the surface of Earth.

✓ I think global warming is the first and major change which is the average increase in the overall temperature of the surface of the Earth.

'1st' should be written as 'first' in formal speech. Also, 'the surface of Earth' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Earth'.

× That has attributed to the overall rise in the world's temperature due to which the glaciers are melting and more and more winter is going out and summers are increasing.

✓ That has contributed to the overall rise in the world's temperature due to which the glaciers are melting, winters are becoming milder, and summers are increasing.

'Attributed to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'contributed to'. Also, 'more and more winter is going out' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is better to say 'winters are becoming milder'.

× Second more important thing is that with the climate change, the areas of deforestation.

✓ Secondly, another important thing is that with climate change, deforestation is increasing.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. It needs restructuring to be a complete sentence.

× So even ever if I get a chance to visit the other cities, I will definitely go there and see see the climate difference as compared to the my own city in which I live.

✓ So even if I get a chance to visit other cities, I will definitely go there and see the climate difference compared to my own city where I live.

'Even ever' is incorrect; it should be 'even if'. 'The other cities' should be 'other cities' without 'the' for general reference. 'See see' is a repetition error. 'As compared to the my own city' is incorrect; it should be 'compared to my own city'. 'In which I live' is better as 'where I live'.