Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, correct grammar and clearer sentence structure will improve your response. For example, say 'I like summer weather in Canada because winters and springs are very rainy, which limits outdoor activities. Summer allows me to enjoy sunlight, which is very beneficial for me.'

예시: I like summer weather in Canada because winters and springs are very rainy, which limits outdoor activities. Summer allows me to enjoy sunlight, which is very beneficial for me.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas and avoiding repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly. For example, 'I prefer hot weather because I can enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach. Also, I like eating ice cream and drinking my favorite coffee during warm days.'

예시: I prefer hot weather because I can enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach. Also, I like eating ice cream and drinking my favorite coffee during warm days.

제안: Clarify your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like 'in that kinda'. For example, 'I prefer dry weather because it rarely rains, unlike the six months of rain during winter and spring. Dry days are better for picnics and outdoor events.'

예시: I prefer dry weather because it rarely rains, unlike the six months of rain during winter and spring. Dry days are better for picnics and outdoor events.

제안: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer clearer. For example, 'Yes, I often check the weather forecast before making plans, especially when going to a picnic, park, or beach. This helps me manage my time and decide whether to bring an umbrella.'

예시: Yes, I often check the weather forecast before making plans, especially when going to a picnic, park, or beach. This helps me manage my time and decide whether to bring an umbrella.

제안: Try to complete your sentences and use specific examples. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary will help. For example, 'Nowadays, climate change affects human health due to pollution and increased heat. Many people suffer from heat stress and skin problems as a result.'

예시: Nowadays, climate change affects human health due to pollution and increased heat. Many people suffer from heat stress and skin problems as a result.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases and provide specific examples. For example, 'Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates, such as Ilona Bistro, because they have comfortable and cool weather in summer. I can enjoy my time there with my family.'

예시: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates, such as Ilona Bistro, because they have comfortable and cool weather in summer. I can enjoy my time there with my family.

× I like the, uh, summer weather in the Canada, especially because there is too much, umm, rush weather during the winter and spring.

✓ I like the, uh, summer weather in Canada, especially because there is too much, umm, harsh weather during the winter and spring.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'Canada'. Also, 'rush' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'harsh' to describe difficult weather conditions.

× There is a lot of lot of rain and I can't go outside.

✓ There is a lot of rain and I can't go outside.

The phrase 'a lot of' should not be repeated consecutively. Also, 'rain' is an uncountable noun and correctly used with 'a lot of'.

× I can take sunlight is very helpful me.

✓ I can take sunlight; it is very helpful to me.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunction or punctuation. Separating into two clauses and adding 'to' before 'me' clarifies the meaning.

× I prefer hot weather to the cold weather because hot weather.

✓ I prefer hot weather to cold weather because hot weather.

When speaking generally about weather types, the definite article 'the' is not necessary before 'cold weather'.

× During the hot weather I can go outside and enjoy.

✓ During hot weather, I can go outside and enjoy myself.

The phrase 'enjoy' requires an object or reflexive pronoun to complete the meaning. Adding 'myself' clarifies the action.

× I can eat cold, eat ice cream and drink my favorite coffee and also I can go on beach.

✓ I can eat cold food, eat ice cream, drink my favourite coffee, and also I can go to the beach.

'Eat cold' is incomplete; specifying 'cold food' is clearer. The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'beach'; 'to the beach' is the correct form.

× I like dry weather because in that kinda I specially see the rain all the time, six months during the winter and the spring and it's for the day when we want to go out for a picnic and any function.

✓ I like dry weather because in that kind of weather, I especially see rain all the time for six months during winter and spring, and it affects the days when we want to go out for a picnic or any function.

The phrase 'in that kinda' is informal and unclear; 'in that kind of weather' is correct. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs clarification for meaning.

× Yes, I often check the weather forecast before making any plan. Go to outside of home especially for any picnic or any park and visit any beach because it's helping me to maintain my time and I also can carry my umbrella to protect from rain.

✓ Yes, I often check the weather forecast before making any plans. I go outside of my home especially for picnics, parks, or visiting beaches because it helps me manage my time, and I can also carry my umbrella to protect myself from rain.

'Go to outside of home' is incorrect; 'go outside of my home' is correct. 'Any plan' should be plural 'any plans'. 'It's helping me to maintain my time' is awkward; 'it helps me manage my time' is better. Added 'myself' after 'protect' for clarity.

× In these days climate change affect the health of the human due to the pollutions and hot weather is become the become the rush for the people and also affect the skin of number of people especially in.

✓ These days, climate change affects human health due to pollution, and hot weather has become a rush for people and also affects the skin of many people, especially in certain areas.

'Affect' should be 'affects' to agree with singular subject 'climate change'. 'Pollutions' is uncountable and should be 'pollution'. 'Is become the become the rush' is incorrect; 'has become a rush' is correct. Sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× Yes I have AI would like to go outside from my city to visit other cities.

✓ Yes, I would like to go outside my city to visit other cities.

'I have AI' is unclear and likely a transcription error. Removing 'have AI' clarifies the sentence.

× They have a good weather like Ilona Bistro skirmish because they have a good weather then during the summer then the study and is the comfortable and cold weather so I can enjoy it with my family member.

✓ They have good weather like Ilona, Bistro, and Skirmish because they have good weather during the summer; it is comfortable and cold, so I can enjoy it with my family members.

'A good weather' should be 'good weather' as 'weather' is uncountable. The place names are unclear and likely misheard; assuming 'Ilona, Bistro, and Skirmish' as cities. 'Then the study' is unclear and removed. 'Family member' should be plural 'family members'.